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Communication is less between family members of late. Do you agree or disagree? To what extent? v.2

Communication is less between family members of late. v. 2
Nowadays, it is believed that the conversation is becoming less between members of the family. In this essay, I would like to disagree with the given contention for the following reasons. To begin with, we are currently living in the age where everything is instant and convenient because of automation, and one of the major breakthrough of this innovation is telecommunication. Firstly, automation makes it easier and faster to communicate with our family, we have a text messaging system that is available in this era, wherein we can update our family as to our whereabouts. It will lessen their anxiety and provide ease. Secondly, we have the ability to communicate virtually with the use of social media apps, email and video calling, most especially our loved ones working overseas. With the use of a stable network connection or mobile data, we can conveniently connect with our families anytime, anywhere. Furthermore, conversation within each member of the family through face to face interaction is ageless and still practiced despite the advent of automation. For one thing, many people still rely on the advice of their loved ones, they make it a point to open up about their problems and anything that they want to share. Another thing, effective conversation is a skill that we imbibe from our forefathers and should be passed on in our future generation. I think that this a legacy that will never die out. In conclusion, I do not agree that communication within family members are becoming less for the reason that technology made it convenient and accessible to communicate. In addition, interaction within members of the family is a legacy that will never die out and should be passed on in the future generation.
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is believed
that the conversation is becoming less between
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members
of the
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family
. In this essay, I would like to disagree with the
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given
contention for the following reasons.

To
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begin
with, we are
currently
living in the age where everything is instant and convenient
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because
of automation, and one of the major breakthrough of this innovation is telecommunication.
Firstly
, automation
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makes
it easier and faster to communicate with our
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family
, we have a text messaging system
that is
available in this era, wherein we can update our
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family
as to our whereabouts. It will lessen their anxiety and provide
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ease
.
Secondly
, we have the ability to communicate
virtually
with the
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use
of social media apps, email and video calling, most
especially
our
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loved
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ones
working overseas. With the
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use
of a stable network connection or mobile data, we can
conveniently
connect with our
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families
anytime, anywhere.

Furthermore
, conversation within each
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member
of the
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family
through face to face interaction is ageless and
still
practiced despite the advent of automation. For one thing,
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many
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people
still
rely on the advice of their
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loved
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ones
, they
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make
it a point to open up about their problems and anything that they want to share. Another thing, effective conversation is a
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skill
that we imbibe from our forefathers and should
be passed
on in our future generation. I
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think
that this a legacy that will never
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die
out.

In conclusion
, I do not
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agree
that communication within
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family
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members
are becoming less for the reason that technology made it convenient and accessible to communicate.
In addition
, interaction within
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members
of the
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family
is a legacy that will never
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die
out and should
be passed
on in the future generation.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Communication is less between family members of late. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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