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Cities are now expanding; should the government make a better network for public transport or should they build more roads to facilitate car ownership? To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Cities are now expanding; should the government make a better network for public transport or should they build more roads to facilitate car ownership? v. 1
More and more people are migrating to cities in search of better job opportunities and lifestyle. The expansion of cities, unfortunately, causes many problems. Traffic congestion is one of them. Some people argue that building better transport networks is the most effective way to solve this problem. Others insist that the government should build more roads to make way for the growing number of private vehicles. In my opinion, both measures are required to tackle the traffic problems plaguing large cities. Improving public transport is unarguably the most effective way to make cities more livable. When buses and trains run on time and provide connectivity all over the city, few people will want to drive their own vehicles. This will automatically reduce the number of private vehicles on the road. When there are fewer cars on the road, there will be no traffic jams. Another advantage of having fewer vehicles on the road is that air quality will automatically improve. Respiratory problems caused by air pollution affect almost everyone living in the cities and a reliable public transport system will help everyone breathe easily. Building more roads and improving existing infrastructure is also important. More roads enhance connectivity and in most cases they also reduce the distance between two parts of the city and thus reduce travelling time. Another advantage of building more roads is that it will reduce road mishaps and save many lives. In conclusion, improving the frequency and reliability of public transport is definitely one way of resolving traffic issues affecting metropolises. Building more roads is another measure worth considering.
More and more
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people
are migrating to
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cities
in search of better job opportunities and lifestyle. The expansion of
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cities
, unfortunately, causes
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many
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problems
.
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Traffic
congestion is one of them.
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Some
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people
argue that building better
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transport
networks is the most effective way to solve this
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problem
. Others insist that the
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government
should build more
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roads
to
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make
way for the growing number of private
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vehicles
. In my opinion, both measures
are required
to tackle the
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traffic
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problems
plaguing large cities.

Improving public
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transport
is
unarguably
the most effective way to
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make
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cities
more livable. When buses and trains run on time and provide connectivity all over the city, few
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people
will want to drive their
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own
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vehicles
. This will
automatically
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reduce
the number of private
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vehicles
on the
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road
. When there are fewer cars on the
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road
, there will be no
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traffic
jams. Another advantage of having fewer
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vehicles
on the
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road
is that air quality will
automatically
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improve
. Respiratory
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problems
caused by air pollution affect almost everyone living in the
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cities
and a reliable public
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transport
system will
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help
everyone breathe
easily
.

Building more
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roads
and improving existing infrastructure is
also
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important
. More
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roads
enhance connectivity and
in most cases
they
also
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reduce
the distance between two parts of the city and
thus
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reduce
travelling time. Another advantage of building more
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roads
is that it will
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reduce
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road
mishaps and save
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many
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lives
.

In conclusion
, improving the frequency and reliability of public
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transport
is definitely one way of resolving
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traffic
issues affecting metropolises. Building more
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roads
is another measure worth considering.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Cities are now expanding; should the government make a better network for public transport or should they build more roads to facilitate car ownership? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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