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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 1
Cars are one of the oldest and easiest way people travel around in the world. As the population has increased, the number of cars on road have also seen a steep growth. I reckon that, the harm caused by the ever-increasing vehicles on the road would see a difference if people switch over to various methods of travelling, which could be enforced by international laws on car ownership. On the one hand, pollution caused by the vehicles has increased at an alarming rate. A plethora of people prefer to use their personal conveyance, even though, availability of public transport is available to them, which has resulted in egregious air quality levels. However, putting up laws on the ownership of the cars could help the governments of the countries who face these problems. For instance, the government of Delhi, India introduced an odd and even law which allowed cars registered by odd number be driven on odd days of the month and even registration numbers on even days. On the other hand, the public transports are not reliable and, in some cases, extremely costly. An average person has to pay a lot of money to travel around. Moreover, there can be some instance where the public transports have faced issues which can cost a daily worker. A car can be a very useful device in these cases and would also allow a person to drive where ever they want, which would not be possible with public transport. In conclusion, cars have been used as the major means of transportation and it would only increase in the future however if public transport and car ownership laws are put up appropriately, it would decrease the rate of multiplication of cars and help the environment.
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Cars
are one of the oldest and easiest way
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people
travel around in the world. As the population has increased, the number of
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cars
on road have
also
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seen
a steep growth. I reckon that, the harm caused by the ever-increasing vehicles on the road would
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see
a difference if
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people
switch over to various methods of travelling, which could
be enforced
by international
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laws
on
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car
ownership.

On the one hand, pollution caused by the vehicles has increased at an alarming rate. A plethora of
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people
prefer to
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use
their personal conveyance,
even though
, availability of
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public
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transport
is available to them, which has resulted in egregious air quality levels.
However
, putting up
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laws
on the ownership of the
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cars
could
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help
the
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governments
of the countries who face these problems.
For instance
, the
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government
of Delhi, India introduced an odd and even
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law
which
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allowed
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cars
registered by odd number
be driven
on odd days of the month and even registration numbers on even days.

On the other hand
, the
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public
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transports
are not reliable and, in
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some
cases,
extremely
costly. An average person
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has to
pay
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a lot of
money to travel around.
Moreover
, there can be
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some
instance where the
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public
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transports
have faced issues which can cost a daily worker. A
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car
can be a
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very
useful device in these cases and would
also
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allow
a person to drive where ever they want, which would not be possible with
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public
transport.

In conclusion
,
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cars
have been
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used
as the major means of transportation and it would
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only
increase in the future
however
if
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public
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transport
and
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car
ownership
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laws
are put
up
appropriately
, it would decrease the rate of multiplication of
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cars
and
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help
the environment.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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