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choose a teacher you admire and explain why you admire him or her. Please include specific examples and details in your explanation. v.1

choose a teacher you admire and explain why you admire him or her. Please include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1
Control of car ownership and usage is a highly debatable topic. There are discussions regarding the alternative forms of transportation and implementing laws for control of car ownership and use. I strongly favour the encouragement of alternative means of transport. I also believe that some law should be there to control the number of cars one can own and use. I shall discuss the reasons for my argument in this essay. There has been an exponential growth in the number of cars in this world in the past century. The main reason for this is that we now have affordable cars available in the market for everyone. Moreover, people have started travelling long distances everyday to work and the car is the most convenient way to commute. However, people have started owning more cars than ever, even if they don't need them. There are more number of cars in every house than the number of people commuting to work. Also, cars have been the status symbol for some. Driving expensive and different cars become common in high class society. I strongly believe that there should be some control to the number of cars each person or family can own. Furthermore, government should take steps to encourage different means of transportation that are convenient to commute. In some European countries, trams are very popular and used by people. They are very convenient as the frequency is good and lots of facilities are provided to people. Buses are also good to travel. Public transport creates less pollution in the cities and road are less congested should people start using them. To summarize, I would say that there should be some laws to restrict the number of vehicles a person/family can own and steps should be taken to encourage the use of public transport. It shall save the environment and travel would be more pleasant as less road jams would be there which in turn reduce the road rage.
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Control
of
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car
ownership and usage is a
highly
debatable topic. There are discussions regarding the alternative forms of transportation and implementing laws for
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control
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
car
ownership and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
. I
strongly
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favour
the encouragement of alternative means of transport. I
also
believe that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
law should be there to
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control
the
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number
of
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cars
one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
shall discuss the reasons for my argument in this essay.

There has been an exponential growth in the
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number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
in this world in the past century. The main reason for this is that we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
have affordable
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cars
available in the market for everyone.
Moreover
,
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people
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
travelling long distances
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
to work and the
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car
is the most convenient way to commute.
However
,
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people
have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
owning more
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cars
than ever, even if they don't need them. There are more
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number
of
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cars
in every
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
than the
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number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
commuting to work.
Also
,
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cars
have been the status symbol for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
. Driving expensive and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
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cars
become common in high
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
society. I
strongly
believe that there should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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control
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cars
each person or family can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
.

Furthermore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should take steps to encourage
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
means of transportation that are convenient to commute. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
European countries, trams are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
popular and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by
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people
. They are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
convenient as the frequency is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
and lots of facilities
are provided
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Buses are
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to travel. Public transport creates less pollution in the cities and road are less congested should
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
using them.

To summarize
, I would say that there should be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
laws to restrict the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
number
of vehicles a person/family can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
and steps should
be taken
to encourage the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public transport. It shall save the environment and travel would be more pleasant as less road jams would be there which in turn
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the road rage.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay choose a teacher you admire and explain why you admire him or her. Please include specific examples and details in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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