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Children learn best by observing behavior of adults and copying it. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Children learn best by observing behavior of adults and copying it. with this statement? v. 1
Children learning capabilities depends on family members' behaviour. They can comprehend potential skill by imitating elders. I strongly agree that elders behaviour works as a guideline for the children so that they learn from it while growing up. Family members' lifestyle have vast impact on their children's. first, When children are growing up that look up to their parents to learn life skills. For an instance, a family member are speaking English at home, their child will also learn to speak English only. Additionally, children can also learn professional skill from elders like if they are engage in fishing business thier offspring may learn to make career of it. secondly, Mother plays essential role in child education and manners as she spend most time with the Child. she is the only one who can tech good manners to child. Child can quickly graspe all quality of mother. Thirdly, childern can learn by seeing and hearing things from adults. For example, if child hear any one in the family speaking bad word, it is possible that he/she will say that in public. People should remain very carefull around children while saying any negative words because children can easily learn it. Lastly, if a child is living with youngster sibling or cousin then upmost care should be taken by parent because they can cause bad influence on it. To explain in dept, maybe the youngster is smoking which can give bad ideas to child because chils might think that he/she can also smoke after growing up. To conclude that, It is undoubtedly a fact that children learn from parents. government and elder should always remain carefull around children so they can be saved from aquiring negative skills.
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Children
learning capabilities depends on family members'
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behaviour
. They can comprehend potential
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skill
by imitating
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elders
. I
strongly
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agree
that
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elders
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behaviour
works as a guideline for the
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children
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so
that they
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learn
from it while growing up.

Family members' lifestyle have vast impact on their children's.
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first
, When
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children
are growing up that look up to their parents to
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learn
life
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skills
. For an instance, a family member are speaking English at home, their
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child
will
also
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learn
to speak English
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only
.
Additionally
,
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children
can
also
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learn
professional
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skill
from
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elders
like if they are
Consider using a past participle here: "engaged".
engage
in fishing business
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thier
offspring may
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learn
to
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make
career of it.
secondly
, Mother plays essential role in
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child
education and manners as she
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spend
most time with the
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Child
.
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she
is the
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only
one who can tech
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good
manners to
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child
.
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Child
can
quickly
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graspe
all quality of mother.

Thirdly
,
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childern
can
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learn
by seeing and hearing things from adults.
For example
, if
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child
hear
Did you mean "anyone"?
any one
in the family speaking
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bad
word, it is possible that he/she will say that in public.
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People
should remain
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very
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carefull
around
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children
while saying any
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negative
words
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because
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children
can
easily
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learn
it.
Lastly
, if a
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child
is living with youngster sibling or cousin then upmost care should
be taken
by parent
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because
they can cause
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bad
influence on it. To
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explain
in dept, maybe the youngster is smoking which can give
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bad
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ideas
to
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child
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because
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chils
might
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think
that he/she can
also
smoke after growing up.

To conclude
that, It is
undoubtedly
a fact that
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children
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learn
from parents.
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government
and
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elder
should always remain
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carefull
around
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children
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so
they can
be saved
from
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aquiring
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negative
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skills
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
32Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Children learn best by observing behavior of adults and copying it. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
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