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-children learn more by observing the behavior of adults. Do you agree or disagree? Give your openion with relevant examples. v.3

-children learn more by observing the behavior of adults. Give your openion with relevant examples. v. 3
IT IS THE HUMAN TENDANCY SINCE BIRTH TO MIMIC OTHERS BY JUST SEEING THEM DOING. THUS IS WHY IT IS OFTEN SAID THAT YOUGH'S BEHAVIOUR INFLUENCE THE OFFSPRINGS A LOT. THIS ESSAY WILL TOTALLY CONCUR WITH ABOVE STATEMENT DUE TO THE FACT OF INBUILT HUMAN NATURE. THUS, I BELIEVE THAT YOUNGSTERS SHOULD BE MORE CAREFULL ABOUT THEIR EACH MOVEMENTS BECAUSE THEIR AWAFUL MANNERS MIGHT AFFECT THE YOUNGERS DEVELOPMENT. FIRSTLY, CHILDHOOD IS A PRECIOUS STAGE OF THE JUVENILE'S GROWTH PERIOD. DURING THIS PERIOD, THEIR BRAIN WORKS A LOT IN COMPARE TO ADULTS. AND HAVE THE ABILITY TO MEMORIZE PLETHORA OF THINGS QUICKLY. SO, WHATEVER THEY LEARN AT THAT TIME GOES WITH THEM FOR A LIFELONG. THIS PROCESS MAKE THEM FUTURE INDIVIDUAL. AS A RESULT IF THEY GATHER GOOD MANNERS DURING THAT TIME THEY CAN BE A GOOD MEMBER OF SOCIETY. SECONDLY, JUVENILES ARE OFTEN VERY CLOSE TO THEIR FAMILY MEMBERS SUCH AS PARENTS, SIBLINGS IF HAVE ONE, AND SPECIALLY WITH THEIR MOTHER. HENCE THE MOTHER'S BEHAVIOUR IS THE ONE WHICH AFFECTS THE MORE TO THE OFFSPRING. TAKE PARENTS AS EXAMPLE, WHEN A CHILD OBSERVE THIR PARENTS FIGHTING WITH EACH OTHER, THEN ONCE THEY GROW UP, THE CHILD ALSO START BEHAVING WITH HIS PARTNER IN THE SMAEWAY AS HE HAS BEEN GROWING UP IN THAT SITUATION. THUS I BELIEVE THAT EVERYONE SHOULD RESTRICT THEIR TERRIBLE HABITS IN FRONT OF THEIR OFFSPRINGS TO AVOID THE WRONG BREEDING. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE WHO DO NOT BOTHER ABOUT THEIR SURROUNDINGS SUCH AS WHATHER THEY ARE SMOKING IN THE PUBLIC PLACE OE NOT THEY JUST DO EVENTHOUGH THEIR MAY AWARE AND STILL NOT CONCERN ABOUT CHILDRENS AROUND THEM. TO SUM UP. IT IS A UNCHANGE FACT THAT ADULT'S HABITS ENCOUARAGE A JUBVENILES AT FULLY. AND THUS, FROM MY VIEW, GOVERNMENT AND INDIVIDUALS BOTH SHOULD TAKE SOME ACTION TO AVOID BEING FAULTY.
IT IS THE HUMAN
TENDANCY
SINCE BIRTH TO MIMIC OTHERS BY
JUST
SEEING THEM DOING.
THUS
IS WHY IT IS
OFTEN
SAID THAT
YOUGH
'S
BEHAVIOUR
INFLUENCE THE
OFFSPRINGS
A LOT. THIS ESSAY WILL
TOTALLY
CONCUR WITH ABOVE STATEMENT DUE TO THE FACT OF INBUILT HUMAN NATURE.
THUS
, I BELIEVE THAT YOUNGSTERS SHOULD BE MORE
CAREFULL
ABOUT THEIR EACH
MOVEMENTS
BECAUSE
THEIR
AWAFUL
MANNERS MIGHT AFFECT THE
YOUNGERS
DEVELOPMENT.

FIRSTLY
, CHILDHOOD IS A PRECIOUS STAGE OF THE JUVENILE'S GROWTH PERIOD. DURING THIS PERIOD, THEIR BRAIN WORKS A LOT IN COMPARE TO ADULTS. AND HAVE THE ABILITY TO MEMORIZE PLETHORA OF THINGS
QUICKLY
.
SO
, WHATEVER THEY LEARN AT THAT TIME GOES WITH THEM FOR
A LIFELONG
. THIS PROCESS
MAKE
THEM FUTURE INDIVIDUAL.
AS A RESULT
IF THEY GATHER
GOOD
MANNERS DURING THAT TIME THEY CAN BE A
GOOD
MEMBER OF SOCIETY.
SECONDLY
, JUVENILES ARE
OFTEN
VERY
CLOSE TO THEIR FAMILY MEMBERS SUCH AS PARENTS, SIBLINGS IF HAVE ONE, AND
SPECIALLY
WITH THEIR MOTHER.
HENCE
THE MOTHER'S
BEHAVIOUR
IS THE ONE WHICH AFFECTS THE MORE TO THE OFFSPRING. TAKE PARENTS AS EXAMPLE, WHEN A CHILD OBSERVE
THIR
PARENTS FIGHTING WITH EACH OTHER, THEN ONCE THEY GROW UP, THE CHILD
ALSO
START
BEHAVING WITH HIS PARTNER IN THE
SMAEWAY
AS HE HAS BEEN GROWING UP IN THAT SITUATION.
THUS
I BELIEVE THAT EVERYONE SHOULD RESTRICT THEIR TERRIBLE HABITS IN FRONT OF THEIR
OFFSPRINGS
TO AVOID THE
WRONG
BREEDING.

HOWEVER
,
SOME
PEOPLE
WHO DO NOT BOTHER ABOUT THEIR SURROUNDINGS SUCH AS
WHATHER
THEY ARE SMOKING IN THE PUBLIC PLACE OE NOT THEY
JUST
DO
EVENTHOUGH
THEIR MAY AWARE AND
STILL
NOT CONCERN ABOUT
CHILDRENS
AROUND THEM.

TO SUM UP. IT IS A
UNCHANGE
FACT THAT ADULT'S HABITS
ENCOUARAGE
A
JUBVENILES
AT
FULLY
. AND
THUS
, FROM MY VIEW,
GOVERNMENT
AND INDIVIDUALS BOTH SHOULD TAKE
SOME
ACTION TO AVOID BEING FAULTY.
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IELTS essay -children learn more by observing the behavior of adults. Give your openion with relevant examples. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
8
Overall Band Score
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