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Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults Thus it is better to learn language in childhood Do you agree or disagree Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience v.1

Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults Thus it is better to learn language in childhood 1
The world would have been a ghost land if all we do is to eat, live and die. It is assumed that individuals have inherent abilities on their inside in order to make them great in areas such as sports and music. Despite this, I believe that anyone can be trained to be as great or even greater those who have these skills within them. On the one hand, talents are inborn. That is, individuals that have these unique abilities in them, do not necessarily have to labour to give them expressions. They are expressed with ease and joy. For example, the Punch newspaper described Michael Jackson as a legendary singer that ever lived. The beauty of his songs came from the depth of inspired skills without any thorough training. Thus, these inbuilt capacities are all that was needed On the other hand, I do not believe that the reason above is sufficient to explain success. Anyone can be tutored to be great. This is because as humans, we have a genetic make-up to be anything without necessarily being gifted. As long as the principles of discipline, consistency and hard work can be applied. The Psychology department of the University of Lagos reported that Ronaldo Van Peter, a less talented but hardworking player, had received more awards than the gifted Lionel Messi. He acheived this by undergoing the pains of discipline. Consequently, he became a force in today's soccer. In conclusion, there are several factors necessary for greatness. However, the most essential is training. This pattern, if harnessed, would be the new pathway to the top.
The world would have been a ghost land if all we do is to eat,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
and
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die
. It
is assumed
that individuals have inherent abilities on their inside in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them great in areas such as sports and music. Despite this, I believe that anyone can
be trained
to be as great or even greater those who have these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
within them.

On the one hand, talents are inborn.
That is
, individuals that have these unique abilities in them, do not
necessarily
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have to
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labour
to give them expressions. They
are expressed
with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
and joy.
For example
, the Punch newspaper
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
described
Michael Jackson as a legendary singer that ever
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
. The beauty of his songs came from the depth of inspired
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
without any thorough training.
Thus
, these inbuilt capacities are all that
was needed


On the other hand
, I do not believe that the reason above is sufficient to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
success. Anyone can
be tutored
to be great. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
as humans, we have a genetic
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
-up to be anything without
necessarily
being gifted
. As long as the principles of discipline, consistency and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work can
be applied
. The Psychology department of the University of Lagos reported that Ronaldo Van Peter, a less talented
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
hardworking player, had received more awards than the gifted Lionel Messi. He
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acheived
this by undergoing the pains of discipline.
Consequently
, he became a force in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
's soccer.

In conclusion
, there are several factors necessary for greatness.
However
, the most essential is training. This pattern, if harnessed, would be the new pathway to the top.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Children are generally more successful in foreign language studies than adults Thus it is better to learn language in childhood 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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