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Childcare has always been of primary concern and importance. Do you think that courses designed to help mothers are necessary or can they acquire the essential knowledge through personal experience? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinio v.1

Childcare has always been of primary concern and importance. Do you think that courses designed to help mothers are necessary or can they acquire the essential knowledge through personal experience? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinio v. 1
Child is most expensive gift to a mother and father. To every parents, it has always been the most significant concern as well as importance to take care of their child. Sometimes, we feel to get admitted to a course which is designed for new born mothers. In other hands, few mothers like to gain indispensable data from the previous experience of older family person. This essay will showcase positive & negative points of taking admission for these courses and personal experience along with a proper example to support my opinion. In my opinion, opt for specific course is a good idea to obtain adequate information. Let’s talk about positive points. Firstly, these courses are designed in such a way that new parents can understand the child psychology in more efficient way. For example, it is one of the most vital issues to understand why a baby is crying and how to make him or her avert. Secondly, in the present days, we are in the busiest time zone, such institution provides tips to manage time for both mother and child. As an example, mostly working mothers feel helpless in order to manage timing. Considering the negative points, some people are unable to pay such huge amount of money to take a part of these lesson. Now coming the personal experience, which is free for all and can be acquired from family members who are experienced than new born mother. They can help in numerous ways to let one understand a child. In conclusion, both processes are good for mothers with recently born child.
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Child
is
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most
expensive gift to a
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mother
and father. To every
The noun should be probably in the singular form: "parent"?
parents
, it has always been the most significant concern
as well
as importance to take care of their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Sometimes
, we feel to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
admitted to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
which
is designed
for new born mothers. In other hands, few mothers like to gain indispensable data from the previous experience of older family person. This essay will showcase
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
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;
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negative
points of taking admission for these
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courses
and personal experience along with a proper example to support my opinion.

In my opinion, opt for specific
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course
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
to obtain adequate information.
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Let
’s talk about
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positive
points.
Firstly
, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
courses
are designed
in such a way that new parents can understand the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
psychology in more efficient way.
For example
, it is one of the most vital issues to understand why a baby is crying and how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
him or her avert.
Secondly
, in the present days, we are in the busiest time zone, such institution provides tips to manage time for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
. As an example,
mostly
working mothers feel helpless in order to manage timing. Considering the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
points,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are unable to pay such huge amount of money to take a part of
Did you mean "this lesson" or "these lessons"?
these lesson
.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Now
coming the personal experience, which is free for all and can
be acquired
from family members who
are experienced
than new born
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mother
. They can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
in numerous ways to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
one understand a child.

In conclusion
, both processes are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for mothers with recently born
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
child
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Childcare has always been of primary concern and importance. Do you think that courses designed to help mothers are necessary or can they acquire the essential knowledge through personal experience? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinio v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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