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Technologies like Crispr allow interesting future possibilities like designer babies Selecting individual physical and mental traits like height Intelligence etc Should governments regulate how this technology is used Give your opinion v.1

Technologies like Crispr allow interesting future possibilities like designer babies Selecting individual physical and mental traits like height Intelligence etc Should governments regulate how this technology is used Give your opinion v. 1
Presently a large number of people take up temporary or permanent employment from their abode. On the one hand, some suggest that home employment comes with numerous advantages. On the other hand, some do not agree. The essay will state why I agree that, although working from where you live tends to alienate you of the benefits of having to be with your family as a result of working from the house outweigh any other. Working from one's abode is family friendly. Many people enjoy doing their jobs from the comfort of where they live because it gives them the opportunity to be with and attend to family matters, which, admittedly they would not have the chance to do if they had to go out of the house on a daily basis. For instance, this is a common practice to stay at home moms, they work from their residence and at the same time take care of their family needs. However, doing jobs from the house alienates. When jobs are done from one's quarters, there is the absence of other colleagues and office related activities prevalent in a normal organisational setting which therefore, makes the worker bored and sometimes lonely. As an illustration a survey carried out in New Jersey about work ethics in 2001, concluded that 70% of staff who do their jobs from their residence have a higher rate of boredom than their counterparts in a structured office space. To Conclude, I agree without any element of doubt that working in a part time or full time job from the relaxed atmosphere of your own lodgings strengthens family relationships and should be considered as an option more often.
Presently
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a large number of
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people
take up temporary or permanent employment from their abode. On the one hand,
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some
suggest that home employment
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comes
with numerous advantages.
On the other hand
,
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some
do not
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agree
. The essay will state why I
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agree
that, although working from where you
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live
tends to alienate you of the benefits of having to be with your
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family
as a result
of working from the
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house
outweigh any other.

Working from one's abode is
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family
friendly.
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Many
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people
enjoy doing their
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jobs
from the comfort of where they
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live
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because
it gives them the opportunity to be with and attend to
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family
matters, which,
admittedly
they would not have the chance to do if they had to go out of the
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house
on a daily basis.
For instance
, this is a common practice to stay at home moms, they work from their residence and at the same time take care of their
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family
needs.

However
, doing
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jobs
from the
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house
alienates. When
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jobs
are done
from one's quarters, there is the absence of other colleagues and office related activities prevalent in a normal
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organisational
setting which
therefore
,
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makes
the worker bored and
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sometimes
lonely. As an illustration a survey carried out in New Jersey about work ethics in 2001, concluded that 70% of staff who do their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jobs
from their residence have a higher rate of boredom than their counterparts in a structured office space.

To Conclude
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
without any element of doubt that working in a
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part time
or full time
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job
from the relaxed atmosphere of your
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own
lodgings strengthens
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family
relationships and should
be considered
as an option more
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often
.
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IELTS essay Technologies like Crispr allow interesting future possibilities like designer babies Selecting individual physical and mental traits like height Intelligence etc Should governments regulate how this technology is used Give your opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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