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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v.3

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 3
It is certainly true that traffic jam is one of the biggest problem all over the globe. In many cities people purchase their own car has been growing so rapidly in the last thirty years and due to increasing car ownership, many cities are now becoming one big traffic. I think this phenomenon is absolutely true. In this essay I explain what measures government has taken to stop using their own cars. To begin with, There is a plethora of reason that people start to buying their own car. Firstly, In the modern phase of life everyone is busy in businesses, jobs, study etc. They prefer to take a personal vehicle to save their time. Another reason is that we don't depend on anyone if our personal car is with us because in emergencies cars are really useful. Secondly, Sometimes people also need a vehicle to to attend meetings and ceremony that can be held in a very short time. Although, Increasing the car ownership has a considerable problem in all over the world and from this in many city traffic issues are rapidly growing day by day. There are a numerous measures that can government take to discourage people from using their own cars. One of the major problem is air pollution due to traffic jam. So, the Government can organise seminars for using less personal cars and give briefly explain about air pollution that if we are not taking care of our environment, then the day will not far at all that we all are put in the trouble. Moreover, Another noticeable measure is that government encourages people to take public transportation in use daily basis. Also society, transportation is cheaper than a personal vehicle. It saves us a lot of time and duo to this also pollution will go down in control. For example, Due to covid19 our Indian Government will announce that 21 days of lockdown and no one should be allowed to take their personal vehicle and in result pollution ratio will down so rapidly. It is our onus that we have a knowledge about traffic and pollution. In the conclusion, from all aforementioned points, I hold my view that the Government must take measures to solve this problem but also it is our onus that we have to cooperate with it.
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certainly
true that
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traffic
jam is one of the biggest
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problem
all over the globe. In
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many
cities
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people
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purchase
their
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own
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car
has been growing
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so
rapidly
in the last thirty years and due to increasing
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car
ownership,
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many
cities are
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now
becoming one
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big
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traffic
. I
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think
this phenomenon is
absolutely
true. In this essay I
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explain
what
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measures
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government
has taken to
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stop
using their
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own
cars.

To
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begin
with, There is a plethora of reason that
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people
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start
to buying their
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own
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car
.
Firstly
, In the modern phase of life everyone is busy in businesses, jobs, study etc. They prefer to take a
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personal
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vehicle
to save their time. Another reason is that we don't depend on anyone if our
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personal
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car
is with us
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because
in emergencies
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cars
are
really
useful.
Secondly
,
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Sometimes
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people
also
need a
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vehicle
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to to
attend meetings and ceremony that can
be held
in a
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very
short time.

Although, Increasing the
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car
ownership has a considerable
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problem
in all over the world and from this in
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many
city
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traffic
issues are
rapidly
growing day by day. There are a numerous
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measures
that can
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government
take to discourage
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people
from using their
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own
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cars
. One of the major
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problem
is air
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pollution
due to
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traffic
jam.
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So
, the
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Government
can
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organise
seminars for using less
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personal
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cars
and give
briefly
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explain
about air
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pollution
that if we are not taking care of our environment, then the day will not far at all that we all
are put
in the trouble.

Moreover
, Another noticeable
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measure
is that
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government
encourages
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people
to take public transportation in
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use
daily basis.
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Also
society, transportation is cheaper than a
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personal
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vehicle
. It saves us
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a lot of
time and duo to this
also
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pollution
will go down in control.
For example
, Due to
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covid19
our Indian
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Government
will announce that 21 days of lockdown and no one should be
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allowed
to take their
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personal
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vehicle
and in result
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pollution
ratio will down
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so
rapidly
. It is our onus that we have a knowledge about
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traffic
and pollution.

In the conclusion, from all aforementioned points, I hold my view that the
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Government
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must
take
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measures
to solve this
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problem
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but
also
it is our onus that we
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have to
cooperate with it.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
387 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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