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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v.1

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 1
These days, many cities are growing at a significant rate due to rapid industrialization and modernization. Transportation has also been improved connecting all parts of the world, but with the flow of money among people, the demand of luxury transportation on the rise. Cars are the primary source of this luxury. In the past three decades car ownership has dramatically gone up making the way for traffic jams and pollution. The concern is more evident nowadays, as many people use car's individually, this makes roads with more vehicles than people. However, there are some solutions to tackle this problem. Firstly, the governments should increase awareness programmes among public explaining them about the harmful consequences of the excessive usage of private transport. What I mean by this is that they should encourage people to take public transport by making it cheap. Moreover, they should explain people that extending the existing roads cannot solve the traffic problem as the number of vehicles are on a rise. In addition to this, they should plan new cities far from the traditional metropolis, this will reduce the traffic stress on the old city squares. For example, the mobilization of people always helps reduction of traffic. Secondly, unlike many western cities some Asian cities have more serious concerns about the traffic as they are in developing phase with many middle class families buying private vehicles. In these conditions, authorities should soar road taxes, I mean that with the increase of the tax, people will definitely think twice about using their own vehicles and look for other options. For instance, some countries impose huge tax on vehicles, this can help in reducing excessive buyings. Finally, implementing regulations and strict rules on driving can also be helpful in the reduction of road congestions. In India, many cities have rules like allowing only type particular cars on specific days. Additionally, soaring parking prices can also help in tackling the issue. To sum up, although governments are thinking about the solutions for this problem, they are failing miserably. People should think about the harmful results of traffic jams like pollution, while they buy or drive a car. In my opinion, cars and other private vehicles are the main reasons of road blockages and their rise should be tackled.
These days,
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many
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cities
are growing at a significant rate due to rapid industrialization and modernization. Transportation has
also
been
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improved
connecting all parts of the world,
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but
with the flow of money among
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people
, the demand of luxury transportation on the rise.
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Cars
are the primary source of this luxury. In the past three decades
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car
ownership has
dramatically
gone up making the way for
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traffic
jams and pollution. The concern is more evident nowadays, as
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many
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people
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use
car's
individually
, this
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makes
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roads
with more
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vehicles
than
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people
.
However
, there are
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some
solutions to tackle this problem.

Firstly
, the
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governments
should increase awareness
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programmes
among public explaining them about the harmful consequences of the excessive usage of private transport. What I mean by this is that they should encourage
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people
to take public transport by making it
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cheap
.

Moreover
, they should
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explain
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people
that extending the existing
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roads
cannot solve the
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traffic
problem as the number of
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vehicles
are on a rise.
In addition
to this, they should plan new
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cities
far from the traditional metropolis, this will
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reduce
the
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traffic
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stress
on the
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old
city squares.
For example
, the mobilization of
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people
always
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helps
reduction of traffic.

Secondly
, unlike
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many
western
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cities
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some
Asian
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cities
have more serious concerns about the
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traffic
as they are in developing phase with
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many
middle
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class
families buying private vehicles.

In these conditions, authorities should soar
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road
taxes, I mean that with the increase of the tax,
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people
will definitely
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think
twice about using their
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own
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vehicles
and look for other options.
For instance
,
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some
countries impose huge tax on
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vehicles
, this can
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help
in reducing excessive
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buyings
.
Finally
, implementing regulations and strict
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rules
on driving can
also
be helpful in the reduction of
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road
congestions. In India,
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many
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cities
have
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rules
like allowing
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only
type particular
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cars
on specific days.
Additionally
, soaring parking prices can
also
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help
in tackling the issue.

To sum up, although
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governments
are thinking about the solutions for this problem, they are failing
miserably
.
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People
should
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think
about the harmful results of
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traffic
jams like pollution, while they
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buy
or drive a
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car
. In my opinion,
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cars
and other private
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vehicles
are the main reasons of
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road
blockages and their rise should
be tackled
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam' How true this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
378 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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