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Campus Construction Should Happen During the Summer---The woman expresses her opinion about the student's proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opini v.1

Campus Construction Should Happen During the Summer---The woman expresses her opinion about the student's proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opini v. 1
Education is of utmost importance and helps a person prosper in his career. It is considered by some that university education should be made available to everyone irrespective of their financial capabilities. This essay will discuss why I completely agree with the above-mentioned statement. To begin with, universities spend an enormous amount of money in maintaining the infrastructure and quality of teaching. Also, universities are constantly expanding and evolving their teaching methods. A significant part of the money is provided by the students in the form of fees. Besides, most of the students are hired after completing their university education. Thus, a section of the population is of the opinion that students should pay fees for the universities to run effectively and to maintain their desired teaching standards. On the other hand, free university education would bring parity within the society, it will also help the economically weaker sections of the society. Firstly, all underprivileged students who wanted to study, but otherwise couldn’t afford would benefit by such a move. Furthermore, this would result in a higher literacy rate, and would benefit the nation in the long run. For instance, Denmark has been successful in implementing such a move and not only has one of the most stable economies in Europe, but also a high literacy rate. In addition, at times parents cannot afford hefty university fees for courses like engineering and medicine, and this would hamper the child’s future as they cannot study a subject of their interest. Thus, due to the above-mentioned advantages it entails, charging tuition fees is completely preposterous. To conclude, in today’s world university education should be made available to individuals across all sections of the society. As universities charge enormous fees, which cannot be afforded by everyone. I firmly believe that remedial measures should be taken, and the government should fund the universities and make university education free for everyone.
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Education
is of utmost importance and
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helps
a person prosper in his career. It
is considered
by
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some
that
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university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
should
be made
available to everyone irrespective of their financial capabilities. This essay will discuss why I completely
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agree
with the above-mentioned statement.

To
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begin
with,
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universities
spend an enormous amount of money in maintaining the infrastructure and quality of teaching.
Also
,
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universities
are
constantly
expanding and evolving their teaching methods. A significant part of the money
is provided
by the
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students
in the form of
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fees
.
Besides
, most of the
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students
are hired
after completing their
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university
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education
.
Thus
, a section of the population is of the opinion that
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students
should pay
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fees
for the
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universities
to run
effectively
and to maintain their desired teaching standards.

On the other hand
, free
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university
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education
would bring parity within the society, it will
also
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help
the
economically
weaker sections of the society.
Firstly
, all underprivileged
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students
who wanted to study,
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but
otherwise
couldn’t afford would benefit by such a
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move
.
Furthermore
, this would result in a higher literacy rate, and would benefit the nation in the long run.
For instance
, Denmark has been successful in implementing such a
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move
and not
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only
has one of the most stable economies in Europe,
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but
also
a high literacy rate.
In addition
, at times parents cannot afford hefty
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university
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fees
for courses like engineering and medicine, and this would hamper the child’s future as they cannot study a subject of their interest.
Thus
, due to the above-mentioned advantages it entails, charging tuition
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fees
is completely preposterous.

To conclude
, in
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today
’s world
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university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
should
be made
available to individuals across all sections of the society. As
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universities
charge enormous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
, which cannot
be afforded
by everyone. I
firmly
believe that remedial measures should
be taken
, and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should fund the
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universities
and
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make
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university
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
free for everyone.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Campus Construction Should Happen During the Summer---The woman expresses her opinion about the student's proposal. Briefly summarize the proposal. Then state her opinion about the proposal and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opini v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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