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2. Would you prefer to go out to dinner or stay home and cook a meal? Use reasons tosupport your response. v.1

2. Would you prefer to go out to dinner or stay home and cook a meal? Use reasons tosupport your response. v. 1
Peoples’ attire is a critical aspect of their lives. It is considered by some that choice of clothes can be a way of knowing immensely about a person’s culture and personality. In my view, I agree with this notion and this essay will discuss reasons for it. To begin with, dressing of individuals show their cultural traits. This is because clothing is a part of every nation’s culture and differences in clothing amongst people is due to the different cultures they belong to. A study from the International Art Organization of London, for instance, showed that Britain people are distinguished from the European people as the former possess modern culture, which can be seen through their unique three piece black and white attire. Apart from culture, personalities of people can also be define and explain through their clothing. What to wear is a personal choice of everyone, which is related directly to their thinking. If a person possesses mature mind, he or she would often opt for decent clothing; however, immature individuals are highly likely to wear unattractive attires. Research indicated that people possessing polite nature preferred to wear simple and sophisticated dresses but those with talkative nature opt for funny and sharp colours clothing. In conclusion, in my opinion, I agree that clothing of a person can be a source of identifying his or her culture and character as clothing of people are different due to their different cultures as well as it can tell us about the behaviour of a person.
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some
that choice of clothes can be a way of knowing
immensely
about a
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person’s
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culture
and personality. In my view, I
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agree
with this notion and this essay will discuss reasons for it.

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begin
with, dressing of individuals
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show
their cultural traits. This is
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because
clothing is a part of every nation’s
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culture
and differences in clothing amongst
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people
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is
due to the
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different
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cultures
they belong to. A study from the International Art Organization of London,
for instance
,
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showed
that Britain
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people
are distinguished
from the European
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people
as the former possess modern
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culture
, which can be
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seen
through their unique
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three piece
black and white attire.

Apart from
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culture
, personalities of
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people
can
also
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define
and
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through their clothing. What to wear is a personal choice of everyone, which
is related
directly
to their thinking. If a
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person
possesses mature mind, he or she would
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often
opt for decent clothing;
however
, immature individuals are
highly
likely to wear unattractive attires. Research indicated that
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people
possessing polite nature preferred to wear simple and sophisticated dresses
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but
those with talkative nature opt for
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funny
and sharp
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colours
clothing.

In conclusion
, in my opinion, I
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agree
that clothing of a
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person
can be a source of identifying
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his or her
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culture
and character as clothing of
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people
are
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different
due to their
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different
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cultures
as well
as it can
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tell
us about the
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behaviour
of a
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person
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay 2. Would you prefer to go out to dinner or stay home and cook a meal? Use reasons tosupport your response. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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