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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.3

By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. with this statement? v. 3
Health is Paramount to every country. It is argued that free Medical Services should be free to the masses, whether or not the newest medical supplies are, Expensive to be made available. This essay will agree with this viewpoint. Firstly, just the proper amount care can save a million from dying. For example, if the current trend of free treatment is well managed, with a proper patient follow up, giving a desirable outcome, There won't be a need to purchase expensive supplies in the health facilities and several people can live. Additionally, free medical services will help reduce cases Of illnesses aggravating. Most serious illnesses are mostly managed with expensive drugs. Therefore, if patients can get free assess to free health services they can easily get themselves treated before the their condition becomes worse. This is why medical services Should be free. Another point to consider is that, diseases can be managed in several ways without spending outrageously. Health is not just about medicines and hospitalization. It also involves the physical and mental being of a person. Therefore, not all illness requires medication. Education on palliative treatments such as environmental sanitation and physical education can be promoted to prevent the masses from coming down with serious disease Condition. For this reason medical services Should be available. In summary, health should be the focus of all countries, irrespective of their medical supplies. Health facilities Should practice active management of funds and palliative treatments to reach out to all persons who needs medical services.
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Services
should be
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free
to the masses,
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whether or not
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supplies are, Expensive to
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available. This essay will
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current
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free
treatment is well managed, with a proper patient follow up, giving a desirable outcome, There won't be a need to
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purchase
expensive supplies in the
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health
facilities and several
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people
can
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live
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free
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medical
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cases Of illnesses aggravating. Most serious illnesses are
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managed with expensive drugs.
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services
Should be free.

Another point to consider is that, diseases can
be managed
in several ways without spending
outrageously
.
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Health
is not
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just
about medicines and hospitalization. It
also
involves the physical and mental being of a person.
Therefore
, not all illness requires medication. Education on palliative treatments such as environmental sanitation and physical education can
be promoted
to
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prevent
the masses from coming down with serious disease Condition.
For this reason
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medical
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services
Should be available.

In summary,
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health
should be the focus of all countries, irrespective of their
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medical
supplies.
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Health
facilities Should practice active management of funds and palliative treatments to reach out to all persons who
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needs
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IELTS essay By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilty of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. with this statement? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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