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By paying more to employees based on their performance level, you can keep their motivation high. Do you agree this is the best way to encourage employees? v.1

By paying more to employees based on their performance level, you can keep their motivation high. Do you agree this is the best way to encourage employees? v. 1
In todays' world, everyone is busy with their work. Time is precious and we can't' get it back. Moreover, humans give more prominence to time and money. Certain individuals believe that spending huge money on travelling by own vehicles is significant. On the contrary, some masses opine to public transport like bus and train. According to me, I undoubtedly disagree with this because it is not an appropriate to spend vast money on transport every time. The following subsequent paragraphs will give a better insight into this topic. Owing a own vehicle and travelling on our own can save lots of time. One can feel free while travelling in the own car, when compared to bus and train. Although it has some freedom, it costs more when compared to public transport. For example, my father saves his time by taking private transport, but the majority of his expenses are spent for his car fuel and maintenance. Moreover, travelling by own vehicle has an abundance of benefits. On the other side, public transport saves a huge amount of money. Although it costs less, it kills lots of time in this process. Moreover, it is essential to stay near the bus stations and railway stations. Pollution can be controlled to some extent, by reducing the usage of less fuel. It minimises the expenses so that, a part of society opine to travel by bus and train. For example, my uncle has two cars and a bike, but still he travels by bus as there is a direct bus from his home to the office. To conclude, both play significant roles in different situations. It is entirely based on the situation. If there is an urgent need like emergency case, it is preferable to use own vehicle rather than bus and train. For example, my uncle who uses public transport will also use his car when he runs out of time.
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' world, everyone is busy with their work.
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get
it back.
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and
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money
. Certain individuals believe that spending huge
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money
on
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travelling
by
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own
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vehicles
is significant.
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some
masses opine to
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public
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transport
like bus and
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train
.
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, I
undoubtedly
disagree with this
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because
it is not an appropriate to spend vast
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money
on
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transport
every
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time
. The following subsequent paragraphs will give a better insight into this topic.

Owing
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a
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own
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vehicle
and
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travelling
on our
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own
can save lots of
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time
. One can feel free while
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travelling
in the
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own
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car
, when compared to bus and
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train
. Although it has
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some
freedom, it costs more when compared to
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public
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transport
.
For example
, my father saves his
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time
by taking private
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transport
,
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but
the majority of his expenses
are spent
for his
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car
fuel and maintenance.
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,
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by
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own
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vehicle
has an abundance of benefits.

On the other side,
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public
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transport
saves a huge amount of
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money
. Although it costs less, it kills lots of
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time
in this process.
Moreover
, it is essential to stay near the bus stations and railway stations. Pollution can
be controlled
to
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some
extent, by reducing the usage of less fuel. It
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minimises
the expenses
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so
that, a part of society opine to travel by bus and
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train
.
For example
, my uncle has two
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cars
and a bike,
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but
still
he travels by bus as there is a direct bus from his home to the office.

To conclude
, both play significant roles in
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different
situations. It is
entirely
based on the situation. If there is an urgent need like emergency case, it is preferable to
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use
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own
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vehicle
rather
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train
.
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, my uncle who
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public
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will
also
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his
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when he runs out of
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time
.
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IELTS essay By paying more to employees based on their performance level, you can keep their motivation high. Do you agree this is the best way to encourage employees? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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