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By paying more to employees based on their performance level, you can keep their motivation high. Do you agree this is the best way to encourage employees? v.2

By paying more to employees based on their performance level, you can keep their motivation high. Do you agree this is the best way to encourage employees? v. 2
Increment in salaries on the basis of working abilities can be considered as motivational as opine by some. I completely agree with this statement in question prompt and will explain my reasons in subsequent paragraphs. Firstly, People work mostly to earn money, and use it to live a happy life as it is considered the way of world. This culture is perceived from the birth; as people complete their study, choose career pathways and later work in those specific fields to live a respectable and comfortable life by fulfilling necessities of living, such as food and healthcare, by compensating through wages. As per my own experience, people feel successful and promoted after an appraisal as it brings a sense of relief from myriad of financial issues. Secondly, increase in income means a direct appreciation at work from employer which not only creates an affection towards company but also result in feeling of responsibility. These culminates in higher efficiency as people try to perform wholeheartedly resulting in achievement of perfection, which could easily be seen in their output. If an organization does not offer bonus, workers would feel worthless leading to deteriorating effect; for instance, decline in effectiveness, which in the big picture affects revenue generation. Although, other methods such as awards on devoted work and construction of friendly workspace environment does produce better results, however, could be counted as temporary measures to boost the morale as these will not be able to accomplish the prime reason of work which is salary. In conclusion, I believe that a pay raise is supreme element for inspiration as it brings perception of devotion, responsibility and affection towards employer; and also help in lessening the monetary burden everyone faces.
Increment in salaries on the basis of working abilities can
be considered
as motivational as opine by
some
. I completely
agree
with this statement in question prompt and will
explain
my reasons in subsequent paragraphs.

Firstly
,
People
work
mostly
to earn money, and
use
it to
live
a happy life as it
is considered
the way of world. This culture
is perceived
from the birth; as
people
complete their study, choose career pathways and later
work
in those specific fields to
live
a respectable and comfortable life by fulfilling necessities of living, such as food and healthcare, by compensating through wages. As per my
own
experience,
people
feel successful and promoted after an appraisal as it brings a sense of relief from myriad of financial issues.

Secondly
, increase in income means a direct appreciation at
work
from employer which not
only
creates an affection towards
company
but
also
result in feeling of responsibility.
These culminates
in higher efficiency as
people
try to perform
wholeheartedly
resulting in achievement of perfection, which could
easily
be
seen
in their output. If an organization does not offer bonus, workers would feel worthless leading to deteriorating effect;
for instance
, decline in effectiveness, which in the
big
picture affects revenue generation.

Although, other methods such as awards on devoted
work
and construction of friendly workspace environment does produce better results,
however
, could
be counted
as temporary measures to boost the morale as these will not be able to accomplish the prime reason of
work
which is salary.

In conclusion
, I believe that a pay raise is supreme element for inspiration as it brings perception of devotion, responsibility and affection towards employer; and
also
help
in lessening the monetary burden everyone faces.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay By paying more to employees based on their performance level, you can keep their motivation high. Do you agree this is the best way to encourage employees? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
285 words
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