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By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. v.1

By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. v. 1
In today’s world, technological advancements have enabled the individuals to give feedback about their online purchases. In my opinion, although it may create unreal impressions on the sellers, it is helpful for the potential buyers as it assists them to choose the most viable option. First and foremost, I believe that comments in merchandising websites facilitate customers’ decision as they can receive preliminary opinion about products or services easily or avoid unwanted situations. This is because an online comment can ensure them to buy the most suitable item or it can even help them to avoid fraud which is common in online websites. To illustrate, Amazon has an extensive user feedback system where people can give ratings or post comments that helps the purhasers choose the most appropriate item or get informed about theft. Consequently, in my view, online comments are useful for the consumers because they can compare and select the products conveniently with the aid of these reviews. On the other hand, some people argue that the feedback system may be manipulated to affect the buyer decision with unrealistic comments. Considering this, fake feedbacks may undermine the sales figures of the sellers or guide the customers to wrong products. For instance, when a seller posts a negative or false comment under the opponent retailer, it may confuse the customers and hamper their purchasing behavior. However, this can be prevented with careful screening of the host websites if they check the red flag comments which potentially try to impede the sales of the sellers. As a result, even though there are potential negative effects of the online feedback system, it can be obstructed as online stores can solve this issue easily. To sum up, it is clear that the internet has brought new improvements to the society. While an online comment might be used as a manipulation to change customer decisions, I believe that it is totally helpful for the customers because it allows them to make the correct decisions before their purchase.
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today
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feedback
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online
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purchases
. In my opinion, although it may create unreal impressions on the
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sellers
, it is helpful for the potential buyers as it assists them to choose the most viable option.

First
and foremost, I believe that
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comments
in merchandising websites facilitate
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customers’
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decision
as they can receive preliminary opinion about products or services
easily
or avoid unwanted situations. This is
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because
an
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online
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comment
can ensure them to
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buy
the most suitable item or it can even
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help
them to avoid fraud which is common in
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online
websites. To illustrate, Amazon has an extensive user
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feedback
system where
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people
can give ratings or post
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comments
that
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helps
the
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purhasers
choose the most appropriate item or
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get
informed about theft.
Consequently
, in my view,
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online
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comments
are useful for the consumers
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because
they can compare and select the products
conveniently
with the aid of these reviews.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
argue that the
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feedback
system may
be manipulated
to affect the buyer
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decision
with unrealistic
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comments
. Considering this, fake
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feedbacks
may undermine the sales figures of the
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sellers
or guide the
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customers
to
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wrong
products.
For instance
, when a
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seller
posts a
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negative
or false
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comment
under the opponent retailer, it may confuse the
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customers
and hamper their purchasing behavior.
However
, this can be
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prevented
with careful screening of the host websites if they
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check
the red flag
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comments
which
potentially
try to impede the sales of the
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sellers
.
As a result
,
even though
there are potential
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negative
effects of the
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online
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feedback
system, it can
be obstructed
as
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online
stores can solve this issue
easily
.

To sum up, it is
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clear
that the internet has brought new improvements to the society. While an
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online
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comment
might be
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used
as a manipulation to
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change
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customer
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decisions
, I believe that it is
totally
helpful for the
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customers
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because
it
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allows
them to
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make
the correct
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decisions
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before
their
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purchase
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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