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By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. v.2

By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. v. 2
Tourism is one of the biggest industries worldwide. It has grown, especially over the last few decades, by leaps and bounds. This is happening because the global citizen now takes even the slightest of chances to visit uncharted territory. So, all the countries are eager to invest more and more in tourism. It has its rich rewards, but there are drawbacks too. At the forefront of all demerits of tourism is the impact on local culture. Still, in my opinion, such demerits cannot outweigh the benefits of the tourism industry. In the modern age the culture of one country or society is open for all to observe and take part in. When in coming tourists get in touch of a local culture they do not necessarily destroy it. It is understandable that they leave a bit of their own cultural identity in the place they have visited. But that is not destruction rather a healthy demonstration of cultural mixing that is happening incessantly all over the world in other ways too, e. g. international media. On the other hand, if we miss out on the far reaching benefits of the tourism industry being foolishly bogged down by the illusionary ghouls of cultural destruction, we are only loosing. In reality tourism does not taint a local culture, rather it fortifies it. Tourist visiting places do not only sight-see but want to experience the diverse heritage and customs also. So, since destroying or transforming the local culture only makes a locality less attractive to spectators, tourism provides ample motivation to preserve our cultural identity. To conclude, we must declare tourism as a boon that encourages the peoples of the world to be themselves, not like the others, while rewarding those who have valued and glorified their culture in terms of much needed revenue.
Tourism
is one of the biggest industries worldwide. It has grown,
especially
over
the


last
few decades, by leaps and bounds. This is happening
because
the global citizen
now


takes
even the slightest of chances to visit uncharted territory.
So
, all the countries are

eager
to invest more and more in
tourism
. It has its rich rewards,
but
there are
drawbacks


too
. At the forefront of all demerits of
tourism
is the impact on
local
culture
.
Still
, in my

opinion
, such demerits cannot outweigh the benefits of the
tourism
industry.

In the modern age the
culture
of one country or society is open for all to observe and

take
part in.
When
in coming tourists
get
in touch of a
local
culture
they do
not


necessarily
destroy
it. It is understandable that they
leave
a bit of their
own
cultural


identity
in the place they have visited.
But
that is
not destruction
rather
a
healthy


demonstration of cultural mixing
that is
happening
incessantly
all over the world in other

ways
too,
e. g.
international media.

On the other hand
, if we miss out on the
far reaching
benefits of the
tourism
industry

being
foolishly
bogged down by the illusionary ghouls of cultural destruction, we are

only
loosing. In reality
tourism
does not taint a
local
culture
,
rather
it fortifies it. Tourist

visiting places do not
only
sight-
see
but
want to experience the diverse heritage and

customs
also
.
So
, since destroying or transforming the
local
culture
only
makes
a locality

less attractive to spectators,
tourism
provides ample motivation to preserve our cultural

identity
.

To conclude
, we
must
declare
tourism
as a boon that encourages the peoples of the world

to be themselves, not like the others, while rewarding those who have valued and

glorified
their
culture
in terms of
much needed
revenue.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Mistakes

IELTS essay By investing in tourism we can earn a lot of revenue and growth in national economy. At the same time it destroys the local culture. v. 2

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  American English
22 paragraphs
301 words
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