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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v.14

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 14
E-commerce has dramatically changed the way people do business and purchase products and services. With billions of Internet users, online shopping is no longer a theory, rather it has changed people’s lifestyles and buying habits to a great extent. Although this has several drawbacks, the benefits of it are far more significant. There can be some minor downsides to buying pieces of stuff on the Internet, one of which is related to the quality of products. As for the former, people suppose that they find it hard to check materials of products compared to shopping in stores. Since an intense competition in the market, they would concentrate to boost selling rather than a heavy reliance in demonstrating products, which leads to the fact that most customers seem to waste money when the products would not be similar to the description on the websites. This can be explained why individuals gradually lack trust for their online purchases. However, some reliable shopping sites still have a warranty policy and return or exchange policies. To take the Amazon website as an example, with the attitude forward consumers, this organization requires precision of products from sellers who upload pictures directly to Amazon websites, and they also have return or exchange policies if consumers have any complaints about the product quality. On the other hand, online shopping can have several upsides which outweigh these disadvantages. One advantage could be that shopping online offers a great deal of convenience, which results in the fact that online shopping gives people the opportunity to shop 24/7 and also reward consumers with a “no pollution” shopping experience. With the widespread use of hand-held smart devices, shopping is solely a few finger taps. In other words, they no longer need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue to pay their bills. The increasing convenience is certainly illustrated by door-to-door services as a way to get products, which enables customers to save much time and energy. Furthermore, consumers enjoy greater freedom to purchase global products from renowned websites like eBay and Amazon, and compare the quality and price of a product before making a purchasing decision. In conclusion, the overwhelming benefits online shopping offers far outweigh the few demerits it has. I personally am an online shopper and I believe that this has immensely improved our freedom of shopping and lifestyle.
E-commerce has
dramatically
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changed
the way
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people
do business and
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purchase
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products
and services. With billions of Internet users,
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online
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shopping
is no longer a theory,
rather
it has
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changed
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people’s
lifestyles and buying habits to a great extent. Although this has several drawbacks, the benefits of it are far more significant.

There can be
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some
minor downsides to buying pieces of stuff on the Internet, one of which
is related
to the quality of
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products
. As for the former,
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people
suppose that they find it
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hard
to
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check
materials of
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products
compared to
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shopping
in stores. Since an intense competition in the market, they would concentrate to boost selling
rather
than a heavy reliance in demonstrating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, which leads to the fact that most customers seem to waste money when the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
would not be similar to the description on the websites. This can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
why individuals
gradually
lack trust for their
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online
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purchases
.
However
,
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some
reliable
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shopping
sites
still
have a warranty policy and return or exchange policies. To take the Amazon
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website
as an example, with the attitude forward
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consumers
, this organization requires precision of
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products
from sellers who upload pictures
directly
to Amazon websites, and they
also
have return or exchange policies if
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consumers
have any complaints about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
quality.

On the other hand
,
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online
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shopping
can have several upsides which outweigh these disadvantages. One advantage could be that
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shopping
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online
offers a great deal of convenience, which results in the fact that
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online
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shopping
gives
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people
the opportunity to shop 24/7 and
also
reward
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consumers
with a “no pollution”
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shopping
experience. With the widespread
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of hand-held smart devices,
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shopping
is
solely
a few finger taps.
In other words
, they no longer need to travel a long distance or wait in a long queue to pay their bills. The increasing convenience is
certainly
illustrated by door-to-door services as a way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
, which enables customers to save much time and energy.
Furthermore
,
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consumers
enjoy greater freedom to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
global
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products
from renowned websites like eBay and Amazon, and compare the quality and price of a
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product
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
making a purchasing decision.

In conclusion
, the overwhelming benefits
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online
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shopping
offers far outweigh the few demerits it has. I
personally
am an
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
shopper and I believe that this has
immensely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
our freedom of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shopping
and lifestyle.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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