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Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.25

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 25
Purchasing on the internet, such as books, flight tickets, home utilities, grocery items are well received among the people. Advantage of shopping online has outweighed the disadvantages. With regards to ordering online, it had made more convenient for people to buy anything, anytime and anywhere. For instance, a person is staying in Hyderabad and his parents are in Bangalore, he comes to know his mother has admitted to hospital in severe condition. So to reach Bangalore as fast as possible way is through flight, but he doesn’t have much time to go to any travel agent and wait. So online flight ticket booking option made him to reach his parents faster. Likewise, we can buy any groceries, daily essentials and it will be delivered at our doorstep and also we can book bus ticket as well on the website without waiting in long queue. Looking towards the disadvantage of buying stuffs on the internet may be concerned with the quality of the product and also may be delayed in delivery. For example, last month I ordered a dress material for my niece it cost me around Rs. 748. I liked the colour and the print but didn’t check the reviews, when I received the product I was totally disappointed. The material was of poor quality and then my husband suggested going for branded one. However, I agree with him always choose the right brand and review of the customers then go for it. To sum up, there are few disadvantages of purchasing valuable online, but when compared to the advantages it is totally outweighed.
Purchasing on the internet, such as books, flight tickets, home utilities, grocery items are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well received
among the
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people
. Advantage of shopping
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online
has outweighed the disadvantages.

Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
ordering
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online
, it had made more convenient for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
anything, anytime and anywhere.
For instance
, a person is staying in Hyderabad and his parents are in Bangalore, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to know his mother has admitted to hospital in severe condition.
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So
to reach Bangalore as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
as possible way is through flight,
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but
he doesn’t have much time to go to any travel agent and wait.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
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online
flight ticket booking option made him to reach his parents faster.
Likewise
, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
any groceries, daily essentials and it will
be delivered
at our doorstep and
also
we can book bus ticket
as well
on the website without waiting in long queue.

Looking towards the disadvantage of buying stuffs on the internet may
be concerned
with the quality of the product and
also
may
be delayed
in delivery.
For example
, last month I ordered a dress material for my niece it cost me around Rs. 748. I liked the
Possible spelling mistake. 'colour' is British English.
colour
and the print
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
didn’t
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
the reviews, when I received the product I was
totally
disappointed. The material was of poor quality and then my husband suggested going for branded one.
However
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with him always choose the right brand and review of the customers then go for it.

To sum up, there are few disadvantages of purchasing valuable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
online
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
when compared to the advantages it is
totally
outweighed.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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