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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.11

Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 11
Now a days, it is rampant for people to purchase stuff and goods online. This essay will discuss the advantages of online shopping that outweighs the disadvantages. Shopping online has it benefits. It makes everything easy and accessible, because with a click of your hand, you will be able to get the thing that you like. The internet indeed is a great help for people, especially people who are always on the go. I for one, do not have that much leisure time to buy a food in a supermarket or even clothes in a boutique. This method of making things easy had really made a difference, because I am able to utilize the time I would have spent in the market, as a period for me to relax. On the other hand, although online shopping made everything easy, it can also be a disadvantage. An example of which are poor quality of goods, wrong delivered item, malfunctions and many more. Even though we might be able to face these kinds of problems when buying goods on the internet, its convenience still is very important to customer, since these kinds of encounters can easily be solved, due to the return and exchange policy. In conclusion, purchasing online goods can be a great benefit to the people, even with its other perks. The essay had explained that the advantages of online shopping still prevail. In my opinion accessible of the things we want to buy is always important as part of being a customer the quality would only be second on the option.
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Now a days
, it is rampant for
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people
to
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purchase
stuff and
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goods
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online
. This essay will discuss the advantages of
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online
shopping that outweighs the disadvantages.

Shopping
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online
has it benefits. It
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makes
everything easy and accessible,
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because
with a click of your hand, you will be able to
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get
the thing that you like. The internet
indeed
is a great
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help
for
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people
,
especially
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people
who are always on the go. I for one, do not have that much leisure time to
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buy
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a food
in a supermarket or even clothes in a boutique. This method of making things easy had
really
made a difference,
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because
I am able to utilize the time I would have spent in the market, as a period for me to relax.

On the other hand
, although
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online
shopping made everything easy, it can
also
be a disadvantage. An example of which are poor quality of
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goods
,
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wrong
delivered item, malfunctions and
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many
more.
Even though
we might be able to face these kinds of problems when buying
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goods
on the internet, its convenience
still
is
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very
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important
to customer, since these kinds of encounters can
easily
be solved
, due to the return and exchange policy.

In conclusion
, purchasing
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online
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goods
can be a great benefit to the
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people
, even with its other perks. The essay had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explained
that the advantages of
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online
shopping
still
prevail. In my opinion accessible of the things we want to
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buy
is always
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important
as part of being a customer the quality would
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only
be second on the option.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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