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Using the example of the lizard from the lecture, explain two benefits of subsurface locomotion. v.1

Using the example of the lizard from the lecture, explain two benefits of subsurface locomotion. v. 1
These days, the colossal upsurge in environmental challenges is quite alarming. While some people believe that the continuous eradication of some plants and animal species is a major problem, others are of a contrary opinion. In my opinion, I believe that tribulations which include water and air pollution are the most significant environmental issues. This essay will expatiate on both views as well as the writer's viewpoint. On the one hand, it is assumed by an increasing number of individuals that the loss of a particular species of plants and animals is the biggest havoc towards biophysical wellness, resulting in the loss of natural habitat. For example, cutting down the huge trees And burning down forest could amount to the reduction of carbon dioxide in the air, which is very pivotal for human existence. Furthermore, if animals such as sharks or whales that consume the toxic substances released into waterways are reducing incessantly, biodiversity will be negatively affected due to lack of interrelationship among plants, animals and humans. Conversely, others opine that there are other highly ranked hassles and I agree. Firstly, air pollution is a major cause for concern. A lot of toxic chemicals are being produced in the air we breathe, which could have an adverse effect on our health. For instance, according to a research conducted by WHO in 2019, inhalation of toxic substances was one of the highest reasons for ill conditions. Furthermore, water pollution is another nagging situation. Even though the existence of industries is somewhat beneficial, their converse effects on hampering the environment by pouring waste products into the waterways is a negative development. As a result, life threatening bacteria are transported into rivers. In conclusion, environmental challenges have been a problem throughout the world and yet, unsolvable. Although losing of plants and animal species could be a problem, water and air pollution could have the most deadly impact.
These days, the colossal upsurge in environmental challenges is quite alarming. While
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some
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people
believe that the continuous eradication of
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some
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plants
and
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animal
species is a major problem, others are of a contrary opinion. In my opinion, I believe that tribulations which include water and
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air
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pollution
are the most significant environmental issues. This essay will expatiate on both views
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as well as
the writer's viewpoint.

On the one hand, it
is assumed
by an increasing number of individuals that the loss of a particular species of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plants
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
is the biggest havoc towards biophysical wellness, resulting in the loss of natural habitat.
For example
, cutting down the huge trees And burning down forest could amount to the reduction of carbon dioxide in the
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air
, which is
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very
pivotal for human existence.
Furthermore
, if
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animals
such as sharks or whales that consume the toxic substances released into waterways are reducing
incessantly
, biodiversity will be
negatively
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affected
due to lack of interrelationship among
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plants
,
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animals
and humans.

Conversely
, others opine that there are other
highly
ranked hassles and I
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agree
.
Firstly
,
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air
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pollution
is a major cause for concern.
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A lot of
toxic chemicals are
being produced
in the
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air
we breathe, which could have an adverse effect on our health.
For instance
, according to
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a research
conducted by WHO in 2019, inhalation of toxic substances was one of the highest reasons for ill conditions.
Furthermore
, water
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pollution
is another nagging situation.
Even though
the existence of industries is somewhat beneficial, their converse effects on hampering the environment by pouring waste products into the waterways is a
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negative
development.
As a result
, life threatening bacteria
are transported
into rivers.

In conclusion
, environmental challenges have been a problem throughout the world and
yet
, unsolvable. Although losing of
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plants
and
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animal
species could be a problem, water and
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air
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pollution
could have the most deadly impact.
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IELTS essay Using the example of the lizard from the lecture, explain two benefits of subsurface locomotion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
315 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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