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Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion v.4

Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion v. 4
The Railway is believed to be the cheapest source of transportation. A single train has the capacity to carry more than 400 people. Thousands of people use it every day to travel to their work, relatives, etc. However, due to the demand for private transport such as cars, the Government is not spending enough on railways. I strongly agree with this statement as the current condition of the trains is very poor. In India, most of the trains run on electricity, which mean they do not create air/water pollution. The trains run in almost every part of the nation and is widely used to travel long distance. Despite all of its benefits the ministry fails to maintain the railways. There is no proper maintenance of the trains, the lights/fans do not work properly. Vents are covered with dust due to which there is no fresh air in the cabin and it becomes suffocating for older passengers. We have to wait for hours in long queues to get our tickets. We are living in the era of artificial intelligence and yet there is no way to book a ticket online. The Government focuses more on the development of roads to collect toll taxes. Their main aim is to connect every village of India to the cities through roads. To sum up, there is no denying that the aim of connecting villages to cities is beautiful. It would be so helpful for the people living in rural areas, but the government should not ignore railways. People believe that trains are more comfortable to travel instead of cars, buses etc. The government should perform regular maintenance of the train cabins and work on the various problems being faced by a common man.
The
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Railway
is believed
to be the cheapest source of transportation. A single
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train
has the capacity to carry more than 400
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people
. Thousands of
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people
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use
it every day to travel to their work, relatives, etc.
However
, due to the demand for private transport such as cars, the
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Government
is not spending
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enough
on
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railways
. I
strongly
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agree
with this statement as the
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current
condition of the
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trains
is
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very
poor.

In India, most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
run on electricity, which mean they do not create air/water pollution. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
run in almost every part of the nation and is
widely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to travel long distance. Despite all of its benefits the ministry fails to maintain the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
railways
. There is no proper maintenance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trains
, the lights/fans do not work
properly
. Vents
are covered
with dust due to which there is no fresh air in the cabin and it becomes suffocating for older passengers. We
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
wait for hours in long queues to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
our tickets.

We are living in the era of artificial intelligence and
yet
there is no way to book a ticket online. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Government
focuses more on the development of roads to collect toll taxes. Their main aim is to connect every village of India to the cities through roads.

To sum up, there is no denying that the aim of connecting villages to cities is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
beautiful
. It would be
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so
helpful for the
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people
living in rural areas,
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but
the
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government
should not
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ignore
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railways
.
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People
believe that
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trains
are more comfortable to travel
instead
of cars, buses etc. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
should perform regular maintenance of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
train
cabins and work on the various problems
being faced
by a common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Computers are becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own opinion v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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