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telling the truth is the most important factor of any relationship, do you agree or disagree? ? v.1

telling the truth is the most important factor of any relationship, ? v. 1
Although, it is considered by some that the crime rate can be reduced by strict prison rulings, others believe that alternative methods should be focused to reduce the crime occurrences in a society. In my opinion, I consider long imprisonments a viable option, depending on the nature and motive of the crime committed. On the one hand, some consider that strict imprisonments can cut down crimes because of deterring effect on individuals. In other words, consideration of long imprisonment will have a psychological effect in stopping a person from committing an offence. For example, Saudi Arabia has long imprisonments for high degree offences like rape and thefts, which has resulted in the negligible occurrence of these crimes over the recent years. Thus, the mere consideration of a long stay in a prison will stop a person to be involved in a crime and this will be helpful in reducing crime rates. On the other hand, some people consider other options to be much more viable in reducing crimes in a society such as involving of offenders in free community work. This will enable them to be involved in a society in a positive way rather than interacting with other criminals in a prison. Moreover, by doing free community jobs like maintaining and cleaning parks, will be helpful in better rehabilitation of offenders and will be helpful to pubic at the same time. It is, thus, clear why many are proponents of alternatives of long imprisonments. In my opinion, how an individual ought to be punished depends on the nature and motive of the crime committed. There should be prolonged confinements for heinous crimes like murder and rapes as the offenders of such crimes have bad motives against human life which need to be dealt strictly. But people involved in lesser degree offences can be punished by other means such as involving in free community work. In conclusion, although there is a variable opinion about reducing crimes by a prolonged stay in prisons or alternative methods, I consider that punishment as per the nature of the crime is a more suitable option in controlling crime rates.
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rulings, others believe that alternative methods should
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occurrences in a society. In my opinion, I
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long
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crime
committed.

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long
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imprisonment
will have a psychological effect in stopping a person from committing an
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offence
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, Saudi Arabia has
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long
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imprisonments
for high degree
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offences
like rape and thefts, which has resulted in the negligible occurrence of these
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crimes
over the recent years.
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and this will be helpful in reducing
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rates.

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hand,
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people
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options to be much more viable in reducing
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crimes
in a society such as involving of offenders in free community work. This will enable them to
be involved
in a society in a
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positive
way
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other
criminals in a
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prison
.
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depends on the nature and motive of the
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crime
committed. There should
be prolonged
confinements for heinous
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crimes
like murder and rapes as the offenders of such
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have
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bad
motives against human life which need to
be dealt
strictly
.
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people
involved in lesser degree
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offences
can
be punished
by
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other
means such as involving in free community work.

In conclusion
, although there is a variable opinion about reducing
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crimes
by a prolonged stay in
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prisons
or alternative methods, I
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consider
that punishment as per the nature of the
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crime
is a more suitable option in controlling
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crime
rates.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay telling the truth is the most important factor of any relationship, ? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
355 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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