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Both large cars and small cars have their advantages and disadvantages. Write about some of those advantages. State which type of car you prefer and why? v.1

Both large cars and small cars have their advantages and disadvantages. Write about some of those advantages. State which type of car you prefer and why? v. 1
Nowadays, some living or working in another nation which is not their nationality. This essay will suggest having chances in the development career is the biggest advantage of job over sea, and the cultural shock will be the primary disadvantage when living there. On the one hand, having a job and aboard to work is an opportunity to develop yourself in your career. You can work, study and know the way foreign companies working. It is the chance for you to challenge yourself and if you passed it, you will self-confidence if not, you will not regret you missed a chance to prove yourself. For instance, my cousin has a chance to study and have a job in Europe, but she decided to continue studying and work in my country. Now, rarely she regrets her decision. On the other hand, getting shocked will be a worthy thing which you will receive for the first time living in another land. You will see many different things with your familiar. The food you cannot eat, the laws, the music you listen to or anything other, everything so strange. A lonely feeling hems around you which makes you are sad and cry. Take my brother as an example, he used to labour in Taiwan. He usually felt alone and missed family after his tasks because he was unfamiliar with that culture and could not understand them. In conclusion, I believe that working abroad is an opportunity in your career development, which overshadows the difficulties that cultural shock brings to you when you initially live in another area.
Nowadays,
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living or working in another nation which is not their nationality. This essay will suggest having
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chances
in the development career is the biggest advantage of job over sea, and the cultural shock will be the primary disadvantage when living there.

On the one hand, having a job and aboard to work is an opportunity to develop yourself in your career. You can work, study and know the way foreign
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companies
working. It is the chance for you to challenge yourself and if you passed it, you
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if not, you will not regret you missed a chance to prove yourself.
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, my cousin has a chance to study and have a job in Europe,
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she decided to continue studying and work in my country.
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Now
, rarely she regrets her decision.

On the other hand
, getting shocked will be a worthy thing which you will receive for the
first
time living in another land. You will
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see
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many
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different
things with your familiar. The food you cannot eat, the laws, the music you listen to or anything other, everything
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so
strange. A lonely feeling hems around you which
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makes
you are sad and cry. Take my brother as an example, he
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in Taiwan. He
usually
felt alone and missed family after his tasks
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because
he was unfamiliar with that culture and could not understand them.

In conclusion
, I believe that working abroad is an opportunity in your career development, which overshadows the difficulties that cultural shock brings to you when you
initially
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live
in another area.
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IELTS essay Both large cars and small cars have their advantages and disadvantages. Write about some of those advantages. State which type of car you prefer and why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
264 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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