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Some people like going to large parties whe there are many people they don't know. Other people prefer small parties with a few close friends. Which type of party do you prefer and why? Include details and examples in your explanation. v.1

Some people like going to large parties whe there are many people they don't know. Other people prefer small parties with a few close friends. Which type of party do you prefer and why? Include details and examples in your explanation. v. 1
In recent times the globe is suffering from many issues and from that major challenge is the air and water pollution, which generated by many companies and construction activities such as many forests is converted into a concrete jungle. The essay will discuss about some remedy to handle this obstacle by preventing environment and natural resources. To begin with, one of the important remedy to avoid water abuse is that ruling parties have to control the waste produced by the companies during their manufacturing work which contains some noxious things which released in the river spills the water level. After applying some filtering techniques which removes such hazardous things from water, then it would be used for household chores. For example, research conducted shows that water containing chemicals used by mankind create health issues such as skin deceases. At last, the government should also start to impose a straight law against the company who try to spoil the water, which would be one of the important need of the common people. The other important reason which helps to cure to reduce air pollution by creating awareness regarding the pollution generated by vehicles. So, promoting to use public transit, this helps to curb the air pollution. Consequently, the authority should also start to promote about the planting trees which helps to generate fresh air. For instance, to manage the atmosphere in the metropolis the authority started to grow trees which provide the fresh air also helps to get rain. Thus, to live healthy life one should has to take some steps. To conclude, by imposing new rules and taxes, government should deal with many problems and serve the nation, even they also enlightenment about the impact on the health, so everyone should make precautionary actions. The authority should also start a campaign about this.
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many
issues and from that major challenge is the
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air
and
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water
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pollution
, which generated by
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many
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companies
and construction activities such as
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many
forests
is converted
into a concrete jungle. The essay will discuss about
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some
remedy to handle this obstacle by preventing environment and natural resources.

To
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begin
with, one of the
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important
remedy to avoid
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water
abuse is that ruling parties
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have to
control the waste produced by the
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companies
during their manufacturing work which contains
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some
noxious things which released in the river spills the
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water
level. After applying
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some
filtering techniques which removes such hazardous things from
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water
, then it would be
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used
for household chores.
For example
, research conducted
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shows
that
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water
containing chemicals
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used
by mankind create health issues such as skin deceases. At last, the
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government
should
also
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start
to impose a straight law against the
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company
who try to spoil the
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water
, which would be one of the
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important
need of the common
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people
.

The other
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reason which
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helps
to cure to
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reduce
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air
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pollution
by creating awareness regarding the
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pollution
generated by vehicles.
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So
, promoting to
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use
public transit, this
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helps
to curb the
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air
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pollution
.
Consequently
, the authority should
also
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start
to promote about the planting trees which
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helps
to generate fresh
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air
.
For instance
, to manage the atmosphere in the metropolis the authority
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started
to grow trees which provide the fresh
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air
also
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helps
to
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get
rain.
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, to
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live
healthy life one should
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has
to take
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some
steps.

To conclude
, by imposing new
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rules
and taxes,
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government
should deal with
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many
problems and serve the nation, even they
also
enlightenment about the impact on the health,
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so
everyone should
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make
precautionary actions. The authority should
also
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start
a campaign about this.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people like going to large parties whe there are many people they don't know. Other people prefer small parties with a few close friends. Which type of party do you prefer and why? Include details and examples in your explanation. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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