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Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified (GM) crops. However, not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified (GM) crops. However, not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited. v. 1
Biotechnology corporations greatly improve the standard of living by developing the genetically modified organism (GMO). Some people claim that this initiative has unproven risks involved in public health and the environment. However, despite this side impact, I believe that, this ultimate method can bring some benefits, which leads to the fact that it should not be halted. It is undeniable to say that genetically modified crops pose a threat to minor aspects of people’s health and the environment. To begin with, although foods that are genetically engineered by scientists increase the nutritional quality, some people may suffer from allergic reactions as well as other side effect which have not been examined as a consequences of this kind of method. Another aspect worth mentioning is that GMO has a detrimental effect on the soil. This means that this approach certainly requires more nutrients and vitamins compared to traditional breeding method, which results in the fact that the soil is drained and gradually becomes barren. As a result, GMO has been absorbed all the nutrients from the earth. Nevertheless, I would argue that genetically modified organism would have a positive effect on the general health of the public and the nature. Firstly, there is a dramatic in the amounts of nutrients, which means that people enable to obtain more valuable and rich sustances of nutrients. In this way, people might sustain satiation, and put a halt in the world hunger. Furthermore, environmental factors as the climate change are no longer a grave preoccupation of human beings. In other words, GMOs allow people enjoy constant healthy diet all year round by foods being available during unconventional growing seasons. In conclusion, while I understand that some people are afraid of the consequences of man-made food since the result of such a product are known. However, the apparent advantages that genetically modified organisms bring to our health and the environment are completely precise. Therefore, it should not be recommended to be prohibited
Biotechnology corporations
greatly
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improve
the standard of living by developing the
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genetically
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modified
organism (GMO).
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Some
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people
claim that this initiative has unproven
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risks
involved in public
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health
and the environment.
However
, despite this side impact, I believe that, this ultimate method can bring
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some
benefits, which leads to the fact that it should not
be halted
.

It is undeniable to say that
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genetically
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modified
crops pose a threat to minor aspects of
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people’s
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health
and the environment. To
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begin
with, although foods that are
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genetically
engineered by scientists increase the nutritional quality,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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people
may suffer from allergic reactions
as well
as other side effect which have not
been examined
as
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a consequences
of this kind of method. Another aspect worth mentioning is that GMO has a detrimental effect on the soil. This means that this approach
certainly
requires more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nutrients
and vitamins compared to traditional breeding method, which results in the fact that the soil
is drained
and
gradually
becomes barren.
As a result
, GMO has
been absorbed
all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nutrients
from the earth.

Nevertheless
, I would argue that
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genetically
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modified
organism would have a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effect on the general
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
of the public and the nature.
Firstly
, there is a dramatic in the amounts of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nutrients
, which means that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
enable to obtain more valuable and rich
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sustances
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nutrients
. In this way,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
might sustain satiation, and put a halt in the world hunger.
Furthermore
, environmental factors as the climate
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
are no longer a grave preoccupation of human beings.
In other words
, GMOs
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allow
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people
enjoy constant healthy diet all year round by foods being available during unconventional growing seasons.

In conclusion
, while I understand that
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are afraid of the consequences of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
-made food since the result of such a product
are known
.
However
, the apparent advantages that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
genetically
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
modified
organisms bring to our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
health
and the environment are completely precise.
Therefore
, it should not
be recommended
to
be prohibited
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Biotechnology companies all over the world are developing different types of genetically modified (GM) crops. However, not enough is known about these crops on our health and the environment. Interfering with nature in this way should be prohibited. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.5
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