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Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourage businesses to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v.1

Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourage businesses to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
In these modernization era, most of people want to build the building in the city this is a huge issue. Nowadays, because of the trade and the homes dilemma in the countryside, the state encourages the enterprise moving in the provincial place. In this essay, I will discuss the benefit and drawback of this statement. Reason in this it is the big problem that encounter of our government due to the small space, and also having a bigger population in the municipality. But it is also a huge help to people who have made making a business because the have more costumer. Firstly, in this topic, let us tell the merit if how this theme can share in our society, if the labour is transferred in the countrified the place become wide and clean as well as not over crowded. Secondly, this spot is relaxing and also quiet, human kind wants to live in the smooth area. For example, If the masses travel in the city they cannot encounter traffic because the highway is clear and not have a big building as well as many buses and car. However, although this is impossible, but this is a good idea if the board of directors implements this role. Thirdly, this matter has also conned if the regime like the business move in the rustic site the community have a huge place and also the fresh air environment. Even though it is far away from the town, but the people have a peaceful mind. For instance, the children are free to play in their backyard and in the park because it is easy to walk. Moreover, the management they are big role in this issue because if they are performance this is not happening. In conclusion, because of the jamming and resettlement the country this is the cause of the many populations in the city. The government needs to do an action so that this theme becomes resolvable and the people having a better place to live. In my opinion, this is strength if the community takes care of the management. Happy people they have also had active and energetic directors.
In
these modernization
era, most of
people
want to build the building in the city this is a huge issue. Nowadays,
because
of the trade and the
homes
dilemma in the countryside, the state encourages the enterprise moving in the provincial
place
. In this essay, I will discuss the benefit and drawback of this statement. Reason in this it is the
big
problem that encounter of our
government
due to the
small
space, and
also
having a bigger population in the municipality.
But
it is
also
a huge
help
to
people
who have made making a business
because
the have
more costumer
.

Firstly
, in this topic,
let
us
tell
the merit if how this theme can share in our society, if the
labour
is transferred
in the countrified the
place
become wide and clean
as well
as not over crowded.
Secondly
, this spot is relaxing and
also
quiet, human kind wants to
live
in the smooth area.
For example
, If the masses travel in the city they cannot encounter traffic
because
the highway is
clear
and not have a
big
building
as well
as
many
buses and car.
However
, although this is impossible,
but
this is a
good
idea
if the board of directors implements this role.

Thirdly
, this matter has
also
conned if the regime like the business
move
in the rustic site the community have a huge
place
and
also
the fresh air environment.
Even though
it is far away from the town,
but
the
people
have a peaceful mind.
For instance
, the children are free to play in their backyard and in the park
because
it is easy to walk.
Moreover
, the management they are
big
role in this issue
because
if they are performance this is not happening.

In conclusion
,
because
of the jamming and resettlement the country this is the cause of the
many
populations in the city. The
government
needs to do an action
so
that this theme becomes resolvable and the
people
having a better
place
to
live
. In my opinion, this is strength if the community takes care of the management. Happy
people
they have
also
had active and energetic directors.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourage businesses to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
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