Today, in some countries the number of young people is significantly higher than that of elder people. From my point of view, this situation causes more drawbacks than benefits to those countries.
One of advantages is increasing the population. In some countries, the goverment may support the family have more children because that can rise the population. Singapore, for instance, has been improving its education recent years as they have a lot of young generation. As well as this, they can develop the comprehensive systems including the qualified teachers and the good environment.
One of disadvantages is the place for study. If the young population keep increasing, the school will not be enough for the study. As a result, the government have to spent a substantial budget for constructing more new schools. Also, when they have the new schools, the number of teachers might not adapt to educate them. Consequently, the universities have to enroll more students following teaching eduacation.
Another disadvantage is the quality of education. If a classroom has many pupils, the teacher can not take care thoughtful for all of them. For example, when they have a emergency problem, they need some help from their teachers. Furthermore, when they grow up, they can encounter with the unemployment because the company can not receive everybody to get a job
In conclusion, some countries having the young population more than the elder population that brings advantages and causes disadvantages. This problem need to be solved by the state.
Today
, in
some
countries the number of
young
people
is
significantly
higher than that of elder
people
. From my point of view, this situation causes more drawbacks than benefits to those countries.
One of advantages is increasing the
population
. In
some
countries, the
goverment
may support the family have more children
because
that can rise the
population
. Singapore,
for instance
, has been improving its education recent years as they have
a lot of
young
generation.
As well
as this, they can develop the comprehensive systems including the qualified
teachers
and the
good
environment.
One of disadvantages is the place for study. If the
young
population
keep
increasing, the school will not be
enough
for the study.
As a result
, the
government
have
to spent
a substantial budget for constructing more new schools.
Also
, when they have the new schools, the number of
teachers
might not adapt to educate them.
Consequently
, the universities
have to
enroll more students following teaching
eduacation
.
Another disadvantage is the quality of education. If a classroom has
many
pupils, the
teacher
can not take care thoughtful for all of them.
For example
, when they have
a
emergency problem, they need
some
help
from their
teachers
.
Furthermore
, when they grow up, they can encounter with the unemployment
because
the
company
can not receive everybody to
get
a job
In conclusion
,
some
countries having the
young
population
more than the elder
population
that brings advantages and causes disadvantages. This problem need to
be solved
by the state.
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