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At some schools, some lessons for young students (ages 5-8) include video games as a way to increase students’ interest in learning. Some people believe this is a very effective way for young students to learn, while others believe it is too distracting v.1

At some schools, some lessons for young students (ages 5-8) include video games as a way to increase students’ interest in learning. Some people believe this is a very effective way for young students to learn, while others believe it is too distracting v. 1
Humans are completely responsible for the adverse effect on forests and animals globally. Some people believe that it cannot be recoverable while the majority of the people are confident about the positive change, if we took corrective action in order to preserve the plants and animal species. In my opinion, it is 100 percentages possible that we can bring back change with a positive approach towards nature. Deforestation and the demonetization of plants are occurred due to un-stoppable human needs from forests and wildlife. Some people consider that we cannot recover which is already demolished in terms of rare species of plants and animals because it is simply controlled by nature. This example illustrates effectively, from 1999 to 2015 in Madagascar 500, 000 hectors of the forest is cut down for human needs such as a land requirement for agriculture, building new homes, etc. These are some of the reasons why we cannot recover any rare plants and animals which are already diminished decades ago. On the other hand, the majority of people believe that we can preserve the natural wealth we have it now if we took positive steps against deforestation and other responsible threats. All the Government authorities should make a strict law and follow properly in order to stop these activities around the world. The people need to understand the importance of natural wealth we received as a gift from mother earth. For instance, in Madagascar schools and college teens took a leap forward in order to preserve jungles and animals. They have started to re-plantation and convincing people why we still need this wildlife and forests in order to balance life on earth. In conclusion, the plant and animal species which we already lost are not recoverable in certain cases. However, in my opinion, with proper actions and teaching people about the importance of natural wealth, we can save nature to save human-beings.
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forests
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animals
globally.
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Some
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people
believe that it cannot be recoverable while the majority of the
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people
are confident about the
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positive
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change
, if we took corrective action in
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order
to preserve the
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plants
and
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animal
species. In my opinion, it is 100 percentages possible that we can bring back
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change
with a
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positive
approach towards nature.

Deforestation and the demonetization of
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plants
are occurred
due to
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un-stoppable
human
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needs
from
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forests
and wildlife.
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Some
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people
consider that we cannot recover which is already demolished in terms of rare species of
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plants
and
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animals
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because
it is
simply
controlled by nature. This example illustrates
effectively
, from 1999 to 2015 in Madagascar 500, 000 hectors of the
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forest
is
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cut
down for human
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needs
such as a land requirement for agriculture, building new homes, etc. These are
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some of the
reasons why we cannot recover any rare
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plants
and
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animals
which are already diminished decades ago.

On the other hand
, the majority of
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people
believe that we can preserve the natural wealth we have it
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now
if we took
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positive
steps against deforestation and other responsible threats. All the
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Government
authorities should
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make
a strict law and follow
properly
in
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order
to
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stop
these activities around the world. The
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people
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need
to understand the importance of natural wealth we received as a gift from mother earth.
For instance
, in Madagascar schools and college teens took a leap forward in
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order
to preserve jungles and
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animals
. They have
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started
to re-plantation and convincing
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people
why we
still
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need
this wildlife and
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forests
in
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order
to balance life on earth.

In conclusion
, the
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plant
and
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animal
species which we already lost are not recoverable in certain cases.
However
, in my opinion, with proper actions and teaching
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people
about the importance of natural wealth, we can save nature to save human-beings.
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IELTS essay At some schools, some lessons for young students (ages 5-8) include video games as a way to increase students’ interest in learning. Some people believe this is a very effective way for young students to learn, while others believe it is too distracting v. 1

Essay
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4 paragraphs
317 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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