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As we are facing more and more problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. v.1

As we are facing more and more problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. v. 1
The concept of country, territory and dividing area were made by human throughout the ages but the mother planet Earth is a single entity and if it faces a problem, the whole world would be affected from that. The world is facing more problems, both human-created and natural, that ever and if the world can’t stand in a single ground to work towards the betterment of the world we would not survive for a long. In my opinion, the countries must work together to make the world a better place to live in. First of all, the unity among the countries of the world has become more important than ever. Without the concrete relationship and the mentality to work together, the world would turn out to be a very difficult place to live in. While one nation has the abundance of natural resource and luxury to live a lavish life, others are suffering from very basic problems like foods, power supply and that’s inhuman to let it happen. The relationship among countries is important to maintain the peace throughout the world. We have never been attacked by the Aliens and it was us who killed millions of people in the World Wars. We dropped atom bombs to kill the innocent people only because they were ruled by a different government who had a different policy. If we continue to let it happen, countries would start more devastating fights against each other and that would be threatening for the whole world. The problems the mother earth is facing like flood, earthquake and average temperature increase are not the problems for a single country. It is a problem for all the nations and they should work together to face it. The countries of the world have volatile economic structure nowadays and no country can guarantee a solid economic stability for the coming ages. The only solution to the survival of nations is to work hands on hands. The poor nations who are deprived of many basic needs would become an enemy of the neighbouring country who has better life standard and thus more terrorist would emerge. To solve this problem, the rich countries should help increase the economic conditions of those poor countries. In conclusion, I repeat the well-known proverb ‘United we stand, Divided we fall. ’ This is true for our world as well since we don’t know what difficulties are coming to attack us and we must work together to face it and to survive.
The concept of
country
, territory and dividing area
were made
by human throughout the ages
but
the mother planet Earth is a single entity and if it faces a
problem
, the whole
world
would be
affected
from that. The
world
is facing more
problems
, both human-created and natural, that ever and if the
world
can’t stand in a single ground to
work
towards the betterment of the
world
we would not survive for a long. In my opinion, the
countries
must
work
together to
make
the
world
a better place to
live
in.

First of all
, the unity among the
countries
of the
world
has become more
important
than ever. Without the concrete relationship and the mentality to
work
together, the
world
would turn out to be a
very
difficult place to
live
in. While one
nation
has the abundance of natural resource and luxury to
live
a lavish life, others are suffering from
very
basic
problems
like foods, power supply and that’s inhuman to
let
it happen. The relationship among
countries
is
important
to maintain the peace throughout the
world
. We have never
been attacked
by the Aliens and it was us
who
killed millions of
people
in the
World
Wars. We dropped atom bombs to kill the innocent
people
only
because
they
were ruled
by a
different
government
who
had a
different
policy. If we continue to
let
it happen,
countries
would
start
more devastating fights against each other and that would be threatening for the whole world.

The
problems
the mother earth is facing like flood, earthquake and average temperature increase are not the
problems
for a single
country
. It is a
problem
for all the
nations and
they should
work
together to face it.

The
countries
of the
world
have volatile economic structure nowadays and no
country
can guarantee a solid economic stability for the coming ages. The
only
solution to the survival of
nations
is to
work
hands on hands.
The
poor
nations
who
are deprived
of
many
basic needs would become an enemy of the
neighbouring
country
who
has better life standard and
thus
more terrorist would emerge. To solve this
problem
, the rich
countries
should
help
increase the economic conditions of those poor countries.

In conclusion
, I repeat the well-known proverb ‘United we stand, Divided we fall. ’ This is true for our
world
as well
since we don’t know what difficulties are coming to attack
us and
we
must
work
together to face it and to survive.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
42Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay As we are facing more and more problems which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
415 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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