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Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers. v.5

Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers. v. 5
No doubt, everything in life has two sides, the good and bad. Sports are just another example, in some cases, it can be life-threatening, but still, a lot of people find it very enjoyable. I guess the pleasure overcomes the danger, especially if it is assessed and controlled. Dangerous games are sometimes very alluring and have a large amount of prize. People like to watch thrilling sports and those short of games are often taken as challenges. Those are the main reasons people participate in dangerous games even after knowing the consequences. To control such threats, standardisation must take place to put some guiding rules to decide whether a person is fit or not to practice a sport of danger nature, also to highlight environmental conditions needed to practice it safely to both practitioner and spectators, a good example would be the rally racing. Cars have to be inspected very carefully for mechanical failures by a highly qualified teams prior and during the laps, a very close monitoring for the road to avoid any obstacles that may cause harm or damage, also the car itself from the design point of view, has to be safe to the driver against potential accidents that may contain front or side hits and in most cases extreme flips or fire. Another clear example would be diving, a very enjoyable experience but dangerous and needs good preparation. Extensive training should take place in a simulated environment like a swimming pool before actual diving into deep water, equipment has to be tested, a dive location readiness to be briefed prior to the dive and a common language to use underwater to communicate different basic sentences. In conclusion, it is safe to practice any sport you like with enough planning and adequate training, no matter how dangerous it is, you just have to measure the risks and get over it with gradual skill improvements.
No doubt, everything in life has two sides, the
good
and
bad
.
Sports
are
just
another example, in
some
cases, it can be life-threatening,
but
still
,
a lot of
people
find it
very
enjoyable. I guess the pleasure overcomes the
danger
,
especially
if it
is assessed
and controlled.

Dangerous
games are
sometimes
very
alluring and have a large amount of prize.
People
like to
watch
thrilling
sports
and those short of games are
often
taken as challenges. Those are the main reasons
people
participate in
dangerous
games even after knowing the consequences.

To control such threats,
standardisation
must
take place to put
some
guiding
rules
to decide whether a person
is fit
or not to practice a
sport
of
danger
nature,
also
to highlight environmental conditions needed to practice it
safely
to both practitioner and spectators, a
good
example would be the rally racing. Cars
have to
be inspected
very
carefully
for mechanical failures by a
highly
qualified teams prior and during the laps, a
very
close monitoring for the road to avoid any obstacles that may cause harm or damage,
also
the car itself from the design point of view,
has to
be safe to the driver against potential accidents that may contain front or side hits and
in most cases
extreme flips or fire.

Another
clear
example would be diving, a
very
enjoyable experience
but
dangerous
and needs
good
preparation. Extensive training should take place in a simulated environment like a swimming pool
before
actual diving into deep water, equipment
has to
be
tested
, a dive location readiness to
be briefed
prior to the dive and a common language to
use
underwater to communicate
different
basic sentences.

In conclusion
, it is safe to practice any
sport
you like with
enough
planning and adequate training, no matter how
dangerous
it is, you
just
have to
measure the
risks
and
get
over it with gradual
skill
improvements.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some sports are extremely dangerous but many people still like them very much. Why do people take part in dangerous sports? Give some suggestions on how to deal with these dangers. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
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