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As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem? v.4

As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem? v. 4
Firstly, utilisation of electric cars can be a consideration to reduce the pollution because electric automobiles make use of electricity as a substitute for fossil fuels - which we know increase the number of emission in the air.   In addition, we also know that the hybrid car uses a combination of electrical and conventional machine. Although electric cars emit less pollution than hybrid cars, both types of cars will help to reduce the pollution if we ban other types of cars that use fossil fuels. Secondly, use of public transportations such the bus, train, and the subway could be another great way to keep off using private cars and to reduce carbon emission. From my perspective, there are many advantages of using public transportations and to promote the use of public transportation the government has to take initiatives. Lastly, the existence of green parks in the city is quite important because as far as I am concerned, opening green parks in the city can reduce the pollution or at least keep production of fresh air naturally. To draw the conclusion, the rise of pollution level caused by private cars is in the unsafe level in many cities. So we have to use the best ways to reduce this problem such as using electric cars to replace ordinary cars, utilising public conveyance and establishing of natural areas like parks in the town.
Firstly
,
utilisation
of
electric
cars
can be a consideration to
reduce
the
pollution
because
electric
automobiles
make
use
of electricity as a substitute for fossil fuels
-
which we know increase the number of emission in the air.
 
In addition
, we
also
know that the hybrid
car
uses
a combination of electrical and conventional machine. Although
electric
cars
emit less
pollution
than hybrid
cars
, both types of
cars
will
help
to
reduce
the
pollution
if we ban other types of
cars
that
use
fossil fuels.

Secondly
,
use
of
public
transportations such the bus, train, and the subway could be another great way to
keep
off using private
cars
and to
reduce
carbon emission. From my perspective, there are
many
advantages of using
public
transportations and to promote the
use
of
public
transportation the
government
has to
take initiatives.

Lastly
, the existence of green parks in the city is quite
important
because
as far as I
am concerned
, opening green parks in the city can
reduce
the
pollution
or at least
keep
production of fresh air
naturally
.

To draw the conclusion, the rise of
pollution
level caused by private
cars
is in the unsafe level in
many
cities.
So
we
have to
use
the best ways to
reduce
this problem such as using
electric
cars
to replace ordinary
cars
,
utilising
public
conveyance and establishing of natural areas like parks in the town.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay As the number of private cars has increased, so too has the level of pollution in many cities. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem? v. 4

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