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As more and more people move from one country to another, levels of racism have grown. Is it the responsibility of governments to tackle racism and, if it is, what should they do? v.1

As more and more people move from one country to another, levels of racism have grown. Is it the responsibility of governments to tackle racism and, if it is, what should they do? v. 1
Some parents believe that their children should focus on reading serious educational books instead of other entertaining books. I completely disagree with this view because it will result in children losing interest in reading. Children will probably lose interest in reading books if parents require them to only read those books which are of educational value. That is because most of that kind of books are boring. They are full of sophisticated figures and complex concepts. Children may spend most of their time figuring out the complex equations and reciting essays. Gradually they will feel stressed if their brains keep learning various difficult concepts and struggling with remembering them. In the end this may result in their giving up reading and learning new things. In my opinion, I do not think reading entertainments books is wasting time. By contrast, reading interesting books can encourage them to read more books. Children can find pleasure from reading those books which can help them relax. For example, picture books can inspire their imagination; some fun science books can improve their creativity. Those books can open a door to another world for them and encourage them to enjoy their lives. Moreover, if they are interested in some topics, they may read more related books to expand their knowledge and gain more experience. This is also a learning process and not a waste of time. In conclusion, I believe that reading a wide range of books can help children contact a more colourful world and grow up to be a well-developed person.
Some
parents believe that their
children
should focus on
reading
serious educational
books
instead
of other entertaining
books
. I completely disagree with this view
because
it will result in
children
losing interest in reading.

Children will
probably
lose interest in
reading
books
if parents require them to
only
read those
books
which are of educational value.
That is
because
most of that kind of
books
are boring. They are full of sophisticated figures and complex concepts.
Children
may spend most of their time figuring out the complex equations and reciting essays.
Gradually
they will feel
stressed
if their brains
keep
learning various difficult concepts and struggling with remembering them. In the
end
this may result in their giving up
reading
and learning new things.

In my opinion, I do not
think
reading
entertainments
books
is wasting time. By contrast,
reading
interesting
books
can encourage them to read more
books
.
Children
can find pleasure from
reading
those
books
which can
help
them relax.
For example
, picture
books
can inspire their imagination;
some
fun science
books
can
improve
their creativity. Those
books
can open a door to another world for them and encourage them to enjoy their
lives
.
Moreover
, if they
are interested
in
some
topics, they may read more related
books
to expand their knowledge and gain more experience. This is
also
a learning process and not a waste of time.

In conclusion
, I believe that
reading
a wide range of
books
can
help
children
contact a more
colourful
world and grow up to be a well-developed person.
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It is astonishing how much enjoyment one can get out of a language that one understands imperfectly.
Basil Lanneau Gildersleeve

IELTS essay As more and more people move from one country to another, levels of racism have grown. Is it the responsibility of governments to tackle racism and, if it is, what should they do? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
7
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