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What do you think is ONE of the most important characteristics that a teacher should have? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why this characteristic is important. v.1

What do you think is ONE of the most important characteristics that a teacher should have? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why this characteristic is important. v. 1
Authorities should spend a lot of chunks on railways rather than roads. However, the spend on roads is also very important. Although, the government must have spent wages on the railway. However, I believe that the authorities should also spend money on roads. On the one hand, government should spend money on railways. The first and foremost reason is that people face a lot of problems in railways. They are not facing only water problems but also they face the unavailability of bathrooms in the station. The reason is that due to cheap tickets for trains mostly people prefer to travel by trains, but due to the lack of space in the trains individuals confronts so many problems. For instance, some people get sick, they have no ability to stand up in the trains. Moreover, trains should be available time to time in every city so people can reach within the time at their destination. On the other hand, the authorities must have invested money on roads. Firstly, the people who live far from the cities they travel by the private cars and public buses, but due to the bad condition of roads people face numerous problems. For instance, because of the bad condition of roads in rainy season people faces many obstacles sometimes they may meet with an accident. Secondly, some roads are narrow in size so it is very difficult for people to travel on narrow roads due to this they stuck with traffic congestion. To conclude that, government should spend the bucks on roads as well as on railway stations because it will help in infrastructure growth of any nation.
Authorities should
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railways
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important
.
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government
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must
have spent wages on the
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railway
.
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, I believe that the authorities should
also
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spend
money on roads.

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should
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railways
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and foremost reason is that
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people
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face
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problems
in
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railways
. They are not facing
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only
water
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problems
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also
they
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the unavailability of bathrooms in the station. The reason is that
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cheap
tickets for
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mostly
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people
prefer to travel by
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trains
,
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but
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due
to the lack of space in the
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trains
individuals confronts
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so
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many
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problems
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people
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sick, they have no ability to stand up in the
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trains
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,
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trains
should be available time to time in every city
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so
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people
can reach within the time at their destination.

On the other hand
, the authorities
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must
have invested money on
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roads
.
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, the
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people
who
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live
far from the cities they travel by the private cars and public buses,
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but
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to the
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condition of
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.
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condition of
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in rainy season
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people
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faces
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roads
are
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narrow in size
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difficult for
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people
to travel on narrow
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roads
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due
to this they stuck with traffic congestion.

To conclude
that,
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the bucks on
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roads
as well
as on
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railway
stations
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because
it will
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help
in infrastructure growth of any nation.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay What do you think is ONE of the most important characteristics that a teacher should have? Use reasons and specific examples to explain why this characteristic is important. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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