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As international travel becomes cheaper, more and more countries are opening their doors to an increasing number of tourists. Do you think the advantages of increased tourism to these countries outweigh the disadvantages? v.3

As international travel becomes cheaper, more and more countries are opening their doors to an increasing number of tourists. Do you think the advantages of increased tourism to these countries outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3
Travelling has been an essential part of human being's life for centuries, either it is for trading or for entertainment purposes people like to go to different countries around the globe. These days visiting another nation has become so easy and inexpensive due to the aviation industry. Although some people think that travelling is not advantageous, but I think it is beneficial for the tourists and the country they are travelling to. In spite of that fact that international tourism may result in a host of benefits to the development of regions, there are still some disadvantages. First of all, because tourist destinations witness a significant number of travellers. Consequently, the daily life of indigenous residents can be disturbed by several controversial issues such as the increase in crime rate, the disappearance of cultural identity and so on. Secondly, the development of trip does not only affect local residents, but it also exerts an adverse influence on the locations where travellers mostly go. Vietnam perfectly exemplifies this circumstance, the Son Doong cave is a popular location in this country, but after the tourists visit too much, the natural landscape has been somewhat affected by travelling activities. On the other hand, travel and tourism is one of the most significant and reliable industry around the globe. It plays a crucial role in helping to strengthen the local economies by urging people to visit through great advertisements to experience the things they have to offer. For instance, every year, millions of people travel to Paris, France to visit the Eiffel tower. In addition to maintain the beauty of the tower the government have to hire people, also, the tour guides who are well trained to explain the history of the tower. Thus, travel and promoting tourism is a proven means to boost the economy, create jobs, and generate tax revenue. In conclusion, although international vacation spots still have some potential disadvantages, I strongly agree that the benefits outperform the drawbacks in this case. However, the governments should figure out some viable solutions to maintain the sustainable development of exploration in their nations.
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has been an essential part of human being's life for centuries, either it is for trading or for entertainment purposes
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people
like to go to
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different
countries around the globe. These days visiting another nation has become
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so
easy and inexpensive due to the aviation industry. Although
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some
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people
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think
that
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travelling
is not advantageous,
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but
I
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think
it is beneficial for the tourists and the country they are
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travelling
to.

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In spite of
that fact that international tourism may result in a host of benefits to the development of regions, there are
still
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some
disadvantages.
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First of all
,
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because
tourist destinations witness a significant number of
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travellers
.
Consequently
, the daily life of indigenous residents can
be disturbed
by several controversial issues such as the increase in crime rate, the disappearance of cultural identity and
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so
on.
Secondly
, the development of trip does not
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only
affect local residents,
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but
it
also
exerts an adverse influence on the locations where
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travellers
mostly
go. Vietnam
perfectly
exemplifies this circumstance, the Son
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Doong
cave is a popular location in this country,
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but
after the tourists visit too much, the natural landscape has been somewhat
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
by
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travelling
activities.

On the other hand
, travel and tourism is one of the most significant and reliable industry around the globe. It plays a crucial role in helping to strengthen the local economies by urging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to visit through great advertisements to experience the things they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
offer.
For instance
, every year, millions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
travel to Paris, France to visit the
If the term is a proper noun, use initial capitals.
Eiffel tower
.
In addition
to maintain the beauty of the tower the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
hire
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people
,
also
, the tour guides who are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well trained
to
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explain
the history of the tower.
Thus
, travel and promoting tourism is a proven means to boost the economy, create jobs, and generate tax revenue.

In conclusion
, although international vacation spots
still
have
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some
potential disadvantages, I
strongly
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agree
that the benefits outperform the drawbacks
in this case
.
However
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should figure out
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some
viable solutions to maintain the sustainable development of exploration in their nations.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay As international travel becomes cheaper, more and more countries are opening their doors to an increasing number of tourists. Do you think the advantages of increased tourism to these countries outweigh the disadvantages? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
8.5
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