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As a country’s population grows, more new houses are needed. Is it better to build these houses in existing cities or to create new towns in the countryside? Discuss Both factors. Write at least 250 words v.2

As a country’s population grows, more new houses are needed. Is it better to build these houses in existing cities or to create new towns in the countryside? v. 2
There is no harm in saying that topic attracts the attention owing to its uniqueness and versatility. There are two dimensions, to be clearer, two factors of this approach. Due to incremental growth in population, one aspect it to utilize countryside for building houses, whereas, a different perspective is to accommodate people in existing cities and countryside beauty should not be harmed. Let’s discuss both school of thoughts before reaching to a final verdict. To begin with, in running days, growing population is biggest concerning factor. It is evident that owing to drastic growth in population, it is quite difficult to adjust people in existing cities. Many countries around the world facing a lot of problem with accommodation. Prominent countries are US, India and Hong Kong, where people are forced to live in 60 or 45 square fit apartment. Consequently, living standards are compromised. There is an urgent need for city expansion and building new houses as population growth is not an interim issue that is going to be solved after sometime. In order to avoid fatal situations in future, it is essential to take proactive measures by building new houses and apartments not only in cities but also at countryside. On the contrary, using countryside for building houses would certainly have negative impacts on scenic views and different tourist’s attraction. This would eventually result in less tourist’s visits and less revenue generation from this stream. Keeping these core drawbacks of expanding cities to countryside, in my opinion, Government should plan to build apartments and flats to accommodate people within cities. Instead of utilizing countryside, Government should pay attention to substitutes for population accommodation, such as allotting certain square foot for single houses. Encourage people for apartment living styles. To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, there is no denial that population growth and accommodation concerns related to this is an inevitable issue and it should be dealt with proper house planning of Government and masses. Using country side to resolve this issue is not appropriate and long lasting solution. Preventive measures should also be taken for population growth in first place.
There is no harm in saying that topic attracts the attention owing to its uniqueness and versatility. There are two dimensions, to be clearer, two factors of this approach. Due to incremental
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growth
in
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population
, one aspect it to utilize
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countryside
for
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building
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houses
, whereas, a
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different
perspective is to accommodate
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people
in existing
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cities
and
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countryside
beauty should not
be harmed
.
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’s discuss both school of thoughts
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before
reaching to a final verdict.

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begin
with, in running days, growing
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population
is
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biggest
concerning factor. It is evident that owing to drastic
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growth
in
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population
, it is quite difficult to adjust
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people
in existing
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cities
.
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Many
countries around the world facing
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a lot of problem
with accommodation. Prominent countries are US, India and Hong Kong, where
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people
are forced
to
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live
in 60 or 45 square fit
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apartment
.
Consequently
, living standards
are compromised
. There is an urgent need for city expansion and
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building
new
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houses
as
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population
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growth
is not an interim issue
that is
going to
be solved
after sometime. In order to avoid fatal situations
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in future
, it is essential to take proactive measures by
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building
new
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houses
and
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apartments
not
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only
in
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cities
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but
also
at countryside.

On the contrary
, using
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countryside
for
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building
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houses
would
certainly
have
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negative
impacts on scenic views and
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different
tourist’s attraction. This would
eventually
result in less tourist’s visits and less revenue generation from this stream. Keeping these core drawbacks of expanding
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cities
to
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countryside
, in my opinion,
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Government
should plan to build
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apartments
and flats to accommodate
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people
within
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cities
.
Instead
of utilizing
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countryside
,
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Government
should pay attention to substitutes for
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population
accommodation, such as allotting certain square foot for single
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houses
. Encourage
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people
for
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apartment
living styles.

To recapitulate the aforementioned argument, there is no denial that
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population
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growth
and accommodation concerns related to this is an inevitable issue and it should
be dealt
with proper
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house
planning of
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Government
and masses. Using country side to resolve this issue is not appropriate and
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long lasting
solution. Preventive measures should
also
be taken
for
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population
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growth
in
first
place.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay As a country’s population grows, more new houses are needed. Is it better to build these houses in existing cities or to create new towns in the countryside? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
350 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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