Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects? v.7

In today’s modern world, there is a colossal upsurge in the people believing that to enhance the ethnicity of a country’s culture; art plays an inevitable role in the community. To my mind, it is undeniable that to teach the children the subject of art is indispensable, due to several reasons. Although all subjects have their significance in augmenting the academic skills of the pupils, the prominence of art cannot be overlooked and should be fortified equally to remain intact with our roots and traditions. As these points require prudent elaboration, let us delve deeper into them in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, there are myriad of reasons due to which art should have a prominent focus in teaching as a compulsory subject in all of the educational institutions. Primarily, there is no denying fact that to make a nation’s cultural heritage rich and strong, the comprehensive knowledge of art, music and literature ought to be taught to the children. To explicate, children are the future generation of any community, so that, while educating a child, the educators should consider art as a primary subject to know more about its historical heritages and enrich his knowledge with the tradition as well as the aesthetic creativity of our ancient sculptures and paintings of many renowned artists. Thus, not only this enhances the creative side of the children, but also inculcate the inspiration towards learning more about art. To exemplify, Dr. Sigmund Freud, an eminent psychologist in his book on Child Development and Cognitive Skills clearly stated that art not only widens up the knowledge of children to a great extent, but also enhances their imaginative skills as well as the awareness about a variety of colours. Furthermore, there is no doubt that other subjects develop language and cognitive skills of the children. However, based on various aspects, teaching art should likely be encouraged. Predominantly, although schools teach various subjects, enriching curriculum with inevitable features of art boost great visual and conceptual skills in the students. To substantiate, as art augments several creative skills in the children, it should be mandated in the course syllabus of all of the educational institutions. Henceforth, not only enhancing the visualisation under the domain of art increases the artistic abilities and commitment towards their artwork, but also will help them in building a career in the field of art and making the ancient culture alive in their artwork. For instance, a survey conducted by the Ministry of Human Resource Development, USA in June 2019 on a group of 450 children revealed that 57% of them who have studied art as a subject shown a great inclination towards becoming a great artist or a sculptor. To encapsulate, it can be concluded that although the masterpieces of art express the image of civilisation, the knowledge of art ought to be stimulated amidst the children as a mandatory subject to learn. If the government along with the masses collaboratively take measures to enhance the field of art, it will certainly flourish to its pinnacle.
In
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
’s modern world, there is a colossal upsurge in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believing that to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enhance
the ethnicity of a country’s culture;
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
plays an inevitable role in the community. To my mind, it is undeniable that to teach the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
is indispensable, due to several reasons. Although all
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
have their significance in augmenting the academic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
of the pupils, the prominence of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
cannot
be overlooked
and should
be fortified
equally
to remain intact with our roots and traditions. As these points require prudent elaboration,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
us delve deeper into them in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with, there are myriad of reasons due to which
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
should have a prominent
This phrase is redundant. Consider using “focus”.
focus in
teaching as a compulsory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
in
Consider using “all the”.
all of the
educational institutions.
Primarily
, there is no denying fact that to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a nation’s cultural heritage rich and strong, the comprehensive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
, music and literature ought to
be taught
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. To explicate,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
are the future generation of any community,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that, while educating a child, the educators should consider
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
as a primary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
to know more about its historical heritages and enrich his
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
with the tradition
as well
as the aesthetic creativity of our ancient sculptures and paintings of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
renowned artists.
Thus
, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enhances
the creative side of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
inculcate the inspiration towards learning more about
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
. To exemplify, Dr. Sigmund Freud, an eminent psychologist in his book on Child Development and Cognitive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Skills
clearly
stated that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
widens up the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
to a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
great
extent,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enhances
their imaginative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
as well
as the awareness about a variety of
Possible spelling mistake. ‘colours’ is British English.
colours
.

Furthermore
, there is no doubt that other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
develop language and cognitive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
However
, based on various aspects, teaching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
should likely
be encouraged
.
Predominantly
, although schools teach various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subjects
, enriching curriculum with inevitable features of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
boost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
great
visual and conceptual
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in the students. To substantiate, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
augments several creative
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
skills
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, it should
be mandated
in the course syllabus of
Consider using “all the”.
all of the
educational institutions. Henceforth, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
enhancing the
Possible spelling mistake. ‘visualisation’ is British English.
visualisation
under the domain of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
increases the artistic abilities and commitment towards their artwork,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them in building a career in the field of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
and making the ancient culture alive in their artwork.
For instance
, a survey conducted by the Ministry of Human Resource Development, USA in June 2019 on a group of 450
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
revealed that 57% of them who have studied
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
shown a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
great
inclination towards becoming a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
great
artist or a sculptor.

To encapsulate, it can
be concluded
that although the masterpieces of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
express the image of
Possible spelling mistake. ‘civilisation’ is British English.
civilisation
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
knowledge
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
ought to
be stimulated
amidst the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
as a mandatory
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
subject
to learn. If the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
along with the masses
collaboratively
take measures to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enhance
the field of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
art
, it will
certainly
flourish to its pinnacle.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad
Show Comments
He who knows no foreign languages knows nothing of his own.
Johann Wolfgang von Goethe

IELTS essay Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
506 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts