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Nowadays people are spending more time in workplace and staying away from home for work. Discuss its advantages and disadvantages with your own experiences v.3

These days, more and more employees are devoting more time to their work than their family. This trend has some benefits; however, it has a lot of demerits as well. In this essay, I shall explore the pros and cons of working overtime. On the one hand, working long hours accelerates a person’s professional growth. As a matter of fact, people who are willing to work beyond standard work hours are more likely to be promoted. They are also less likely to be laid off in the event of a downsizing. In this day and age when competition is tough working overtime is the only option for many employees to stay in their job. When employees are willing to put in more hours, the organization will be able to deliver projects on time and this in turn will improve their bottom line. Companies may also share a part of the profit with their employees by offering them higher salaries. On the other hand, when people spend too much time at the workplace their family relationships suffer the most. Having little or no time for one’s spouse and children will lead to conflicts within the family. This will increase the stress levels of employees as we all their family members. Stressed out workers cannot deliver satisfactory performance at the workplace even if they spend too much time in the office. Another downside of this trend is that working long hours without taking a break will affect the health of workers. They become more prone to developing various lifestyle diseases like hyper tension, diabetes and cardiac trouble. This in turn will further reduce their productivity by forcing them to avail of more sick leaves. To conclude, unrealistic targets and tough competition hves forced many employees to work overtime. The main advantage of this situation is that it might improve their chances of getting a promotion or raise. The main disadvantage is that it affects their health and productivity by elevating their stress levels. In my opinion, it is important for employees to strike a work-life balance.
These days, more and more
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employees
are devoting more
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time
to their
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work
than their
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family
. This trend has
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some
benefits;
however
, it has
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a lot of
demerits
as well
. In this essay, I shall explore the pros and cons of
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working
overtime.

On the one hand,
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working
long
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hours
accelerates a person’s professional growth. As a matter of fact,
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people
who are willing to
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work
beyond standard
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work
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hours
are more likely to
be promoted
. They are
also
less likely to
be laid
off in the
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event
of a downsizing. In this day and age when competition is tough
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working
overtime is the
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only
option for
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many
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employees
to stay in their job. When
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employees
are willing to put in more
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hours
, the organization will be able to deliver projects on
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time
and this in turn will
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improve
their bottom line.
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Companies
may
also
share a part of the profit with their
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employees
by offering them higher salaries.

On the other hand
, when
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people
spend too much
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time
at the workplace their
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family
relationships suffer the most. Having
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little
or no
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time
for one’s spouse and children will lead to conflicts within the
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family
. This will increase the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
levels of
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employees
as we all their
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family
members.
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Stressed
out workers cannot deliver satisfactory performance at the workplace even if they spend too much
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time
in the office. Another downside of this trend is that
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working
long
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hours
without taking a break will affect the health of workers. They become more prone to developing various lifestyle diseases like
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hyper tension
, diabetes and cardiac trouble. This in turn will
further
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reduce
their productivity by forcing them to avail of more sick
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leaves
.

To conclude
, unrealistic targets and tough competition
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hves
forced
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many
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employees
to
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work
overtime. The main advantage of this situation is that it might
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improve
their chances of getting a promotion or raise. The main disadvantage is that it affects their health and productivity by elevating their
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stress
levels. In my opinion, it is
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important
for
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employees
to strike a work-life balance.
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IELTS essay Nowadays People Are Spending More Time In Workplace And Staying Away From Home.

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344 words
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