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Around the world, large cities face the task of dealing with rapid population increase. What problems foes urban growth cause? What are some possible solutions to these problems? v.1

Around the world, large cities face the task of dealing with rapid population increase. What problems foes urban growth cause? What are some possible solutions to these problems? v. 1
While urban growth is a sign of a country's economic development, a rapid population increase result in issues. It leads to insufficient housing available and safety concerns. This essay will discuss these problems and provide some solutions. First, As the population increase, residents in large cities do not have enough houses. The available space for per person decline, householders feel mental and physical discomfort, live unsatisfactorily environmental condition. So they start to move from home to the street outskirt of the city and build a cabin in an unhealthy situation. Housing space problem drives to another issue such as critical health and wellbeing. To tackle this issue, the government should build more public houses and rent to residents by a low-rate loan. In consequence, they prevent residents to leave their homes and live with families without any concern. The second problem caused by urban growth is safety. The rate of committing a crime is increasing as much as the city is developing. Robbing, assault, and thief are an example. Not only these, but residents also tend to do accusation. As a result of a lack of technology and acknowledge of law in large cities, the court does not separate the offender and defendant. When the defendant goes to jail, residents may lose their safe guarantee in their country. The way to solve this problem is that the government should increase a fine of accusation, install cameras in a hidden place, it is possible to commit a crime, and increase polices who examine the residential ground regularly. By this way, the government decrease resident's safety concern. In conclusion, However, large cities are developing, there are two problems resulted in its rapid population growth; safety concern and insufficient housing available. Not enough space in the resident's house effect on their mental and physical health, so they move to the street in a critical situation. As population growth, the judgment cannot separate who commit or does not commit a crime. Residents start to concern their safety. To prevent or tackle these issues, the government should run the housing and safety program.
While urban
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growth
is a
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sign
of a country's economic development, a rapid
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population
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increase
result in
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issues
. It leads to insufficient housing available and
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safety
concerns. This essay will discuss these
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problems
and provide
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some
solutions.

First
, As the
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population
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increase
,
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residents
in large
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cities
do not have
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enough
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houses
. The available space for per person decline, householders feel mental and physical discomfort,
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live
unsatisfactorily
environmental condition.
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So
they
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start
to
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move
from home to the street outskirt of the city and build a cabin in an unhealthy situation. Housing space
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problem
drives to another
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issue
such as critical health and
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wellbeing
. To tackle this
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issue
, the
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government
should build more public
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houses
and rent to
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residents
by a low-rate loan. In consequence, they
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prevent
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residents
to
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their homes and
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live
with families without any concern.

The second
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problem
caused by urban
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growth
is
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safety
. The rate of committing a crime is increasing as much as the city is developing. Robbing, assault, and thief are an example. Not
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only
these,
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but
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residents
also
tend to do accusation.
As a result
of a lack of technology and acknowledge of law in large
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cities
, the court does not separate the offender and defendant. When the defendant goes to jail,
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residents
may lose their safe guarantee in their country. The way to solve this
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problem
is that the
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government
should
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increase
a fine of accusation, install cameras in a hidden place, it is possible to commit a crime, and
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increase
polices who examine the residential ground
regularly
. By this way, the
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government
decrease resident's
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safety
concern.

In conclusion
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, large
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cities
are developing, there are two
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problems
resulted in its rapid
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population
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growth
;
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safety
concern and insufficient housing available. Not
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enough
space in the resident's
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house
effect on their mental and physical health,
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so
they
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move
to the street in a critical situation. As
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population
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growth
, the judgment cannot separate who commit or does not commit a crime.
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Residents
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start
to concern their
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safety
. To
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prevent
or tackle these
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issues
, the
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government
should run the housing and
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safety
program.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Around the world, large cities face the task of dealing with rapid population increase. What problems foes urban growth cause? What are some possible solutions to these problems? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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