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Are government doing well in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating? v.1

Are government doing well in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating? v. 1
It is true that medicines and other products are routinely tested on animals before they are cleared for human use. While I tend towards the viewpoint that animal testing is morally wrong, I would have to support a limited amount of animal experimentation for the development of medicines. On the one hand, there are clear ethical arguments against animal experimentation. To use a common example of this practice, laboratory mice may be given an illness so that the effectiveness of a new drug can be measured. Opponents of such research argue that humans have no right to subject animals to this kind of trauma, and that the lives of all creatures should be respected. They believe that the benefits to humans do not justify the suffering caused, and that scientists should use alternative methods of research. On the other hand, reliable alternatives to animal experimentation may not always be available. Supporters of the use of animals in medical research believe that a certain amount of suffering on the part of mice or rats can be justified if human lives are saved. They argue that opponents of such research might feel differently if a member of their own families needed a medical treatment that had been developed through the use of animal experimentation. Personally, I agree with the banning of animal testing for non-medical products, but I feel that it may be a necessary evil where new drugs and medical procedures are concerned. In conclusion, it seems to me that it would be wrong to ban testing on animals for vital medical research until equally effective alternatives have been developed.
It is true that medicines and other products are
routinely
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tested
on
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animals
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before
they
are cleared
for
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human
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use
. While I tend towards the viewpoint that
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animal
testing is
morally
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wrong
, I would
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have to
support a limited amount of
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animal
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experimentation
for the development of medicines.

On the one hand, there are
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clear
ethical arguments against
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animal
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experimentation
. To
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use
a common example of this practice, laboratory mice may be
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given
an illness
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so
that the effectiveness of a new drug can
be measured
. Opponents of such
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research
argue that
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humans
have no right to subject
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animals
to this kind of trauma, and that the
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lives
of all creatures should
be respected
. They believe that the benefits to
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humans
do not justify the suffering caused, and that scientists should
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use
alternative methods of research.

On the other hand
, reliable alternatives to
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animal
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experimentation
may not always be available. Supporters of the
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use
of
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animals
in
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medical
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research
believe that a certain amount of suffering on the part of mice or rats can
be justified
if
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human
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lives
are saved
. They argue that opponents of such
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research
might feel
differently
if a member of their
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own
families needed a
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medical
treatment that had
been developed
through the
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use
of
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animal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
experimentation
.
Personally
, I
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agree
with the banning of
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animal
testing for non-medical products,
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but
I feel that it may be a necessary evil where new drugs and
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medical
procedures
are concerned
.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that it would be
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wrong
to ban testing on
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animals
for vital
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medical
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research
until
equally
effective alternatives have
been developed
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Are government doing well in educating people to pay attention to the importance of the food nutrition and healthy eating? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
269 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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