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An increasing number of people work from home these days and stay in touch with their office using computer technology. v.5

An increasing number of people work from home these days and stay in touch with their office using computer technology. v. 5
As the use of the internet is becoming relevant and faster these days, many companies have sorted to let their employees work at home and stay in communication with their office. This set-up has huge positive effects on the employers and employees as it saves a lot of time and money in the long run. This practice is becoming popular in many modern companies which are using computers to run their projects. Working at home can save time as the employees do not need to travel long hours just to get to the office. This is a big advantage, especially if the company is far from home or if the company is based overseas. For example; people working in construction, medical transcriptionists, language tutorials and call centres can just submit their works through different internet based sites such as; Dropbox, Hightail, Yousendit and etc. As a result, a great amount of time is saved in the process. On the other hand, working off-shores can also save money since companies do not have to rent big offices and they can minimise the use of electricity, water and other important resources in running a business. They just need to invest in high-tech servers which in the end will be a great asset. These servers can also be accessed remotely by IT managers anytime that they want. As a conclusion, computer technology has a great importance and has big effects to save time and money if companies know how to take advantage of it. By offering off-shore works, companies and employees can now work hand in hand for having a productive environment while having close communications, and at the same time will add to company’s growth and success to this computer era.
As the
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use
of the internet is becoming relevant and faster these days,
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many
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companies
have sorted to
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let
their
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employees
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work
at home and stay in communication with their office. This set-up has huge
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positive
effects on the employers and
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employees
as it
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saves
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a lot of
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time
and money in the long run. This practice is becoming popular in
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many
modern
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companies
which are using computers to run their projects.

Working at home can
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save
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time
as the
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employees
do not need to travel long hours
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just
to
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get
to the office. This is a
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big
advantage,
especially
if the
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company
is far from home or if the
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company
is based
overseas.
For example
;
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people
working in construction, medical transcriptionists, language tutorials and call
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centres
can
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just
submit their works through
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different
internet based sites such as; Dropbox, Hightail,
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Yousendit
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and etc
.
As a result
, a great amount of
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time
is saved
in the process.

On the other hand
, working off-shores can
also
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save
money since
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companies
do not
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have to
rent
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big
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offices and
they can
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minimise
the
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use
of electricity, water and other
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important
resources in running a business. They
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just
need to invest in high-tech servers which in the
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end
will be a great asset. These servers can
also
be accessed
remotely
by IT managers anytime that they want.

As a conclusion, computer technology has a great importance and has
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big
effects to
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save
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time
and money if
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companies
know how to take advantage of it. By offering off-shore works,
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companies
and
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employees
can
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now
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work
hand in hand for having a productive environment while having close communications, and at the same
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time
will
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add
to
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company’s
growth and success to this computer era.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay An increasing number of people work from home these days and stay in touch with their office using computer technology. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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