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When students are in large classes it is very hard for the teachers to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this? v.3

When students are in large classes it is very hard for the teachers to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this? v. 3
Undeniably, it has rarely become possible that tutors have enough supervision on each pupil in institutes with roomy classes. This can negatively influence students’ educational performance, and to tackle this issue, I personally believe that school authorities must implement some practical solutions, including raising the educational budget, using the latest versions of learning methods and changing the designs of seats in these classes. To start with, one pivotal solution is that the needed educational funds must be provided. Definitely, by having a higher financial backup, not only more instructors will be hired, but a fewer numbers of students will be involved in teaching in each classroom. As a prime example, instead of participation of over one hundred applicants in each classroom in UBC University, a very popular university in Canada, consideration of more money for hiring of more employees will help educators to teach less than fifty people instead of over hundred ones, and the overall quality of teaching will be improved phenomenally. Another important method is the usage of modern teaching systems in these classes. Obviously, using some technical facilities will lead all trainees to understand better the study subjects taught by their teacher. In particular, showing pictures or videos on a large screen is to become a common method in many lecture rooms, and instead of using a whiteboard, which could only be seen by less than half of the total students, for all participants, a more clear and accurate image can be shown. Therefore, educators can explain more deeply the study materials to each student. Lastly, the next approach is the modification in designing of seats. Admittedly, had chairs been installed in a circle in these classes, the instructor would have a better control on each person; however, unfortunately, students’ seats are used to be designed in rows, and those sitting on the rear lines cannot be supervised by their teacher in a perfect way. In brief, in roomy classes, all scholars cannot be taught appropriately. In my view, school authorities should implement several empiric methods to come up with this problem. In my view, this can be booming the budget for registration of more teachers, applying novel teaching systems and changing the seats in a correct way in these classes.
Undeniably
, it has rarely become possible that tutors have
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enough
supervision on each pupil in institutes with roomy
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classes
. This can
negatively
influence
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students’
educational performance, and to tackle this issue, I
personally
believe that school authorities
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must
implement
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some
practical solutions, including raising the educational budget, using the latest versions of learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
and changing the designs of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seats
in these classes.

To
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start
with, one pivotal solution is that the needed educational funds
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be provided
. Definitely, by having a higher financial backup, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
more instructors will
be hired
,
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but
a fewer numbers of
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students
will
be involved
in
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teaching
in each classroom. As a prime example,
instead
of participation of over one hundred applicants in each classroom in UBC University, a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
popular university in Canada, consideration of more money for hiring of more employees will
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help
educators to teach less than fifty
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people
instead
of over hundred ones, and the
overall
quality of
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teaching
will be
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improved
phenomenally
.

Another
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important
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method
is the usage of modern
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teaching
systems in these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
.
Obviously
, using
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
technical facilities will lead all trainees to understand better the study subjects taught by their teacher.
In particular
, showing pictures or videos on a large screen is to become a common
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method
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
lecture rooms, and
instead
of using a whiteboard, which could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be
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seen
by less than half of the total
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students
, for all participants, a more
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
and accurate image can
be shown
.
Therefore
, educators can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
more
deeply
the study materials to each student.

Lastly
, the
next
approach is the modification in designing of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seats
.
Admittedly
, had chairs
been installed
in a circle in these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
, the instructor would have a better control on each person;
however
, unfortunately,
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students’
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seats
are
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used
to
be designed
in rows, and those sitting on the rear lines cannot
be supervised
by their teacher
Consider replacing "in a perfect way" with the adverb for "perfect"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a perfect way
.

In brief
, in roomy
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
, all scholars cannot
be taught
appropriately
. In my view, school authorities should implement several empiric
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
methods
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
up with this problem.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
my view, this can be booming the budget for registration of more teachers, applying novel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teaching
systems and changing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
seats
Consider replacing "in a correct way" with the adverb for "correct"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a correct way
in these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
classes
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay When students are in large classes it is very hard for the teachers to give every student individual attention. What can educational authorities do about this? v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
374 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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