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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this. v.24

An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this. v. 24
Nowadays, more number of people are shopping their needful things online. Although there are many advantages of this such as it is time-saving and you can order while sitting at home or office, there are few disadvantages as well, which impact the business of shopkeepers. This essay will explain both the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping. On the one hand, buying things online, which is quite popular these days, saves people's time as well as energy. Firstly, people are not required to go to market to purchase things. Previously, when online shopping was not popular, everybody had to go out to buy their daily needs from shopping complexes, which is used to take their precious time in commuting. To illustrate this, most of the working people are too busy that they do not have time to go and buy things, so they usually order from the office itself. Secondly, online shopping websites provide more variety of products from different vendor. For instance, They also provide option to compare the items. Consequently, people prefer to do more online shopping. On the other hand, the online shopping had impacted the business of shopkeepers and multiplexes very badly and their sales have reduced drastically. Additionally, due to this, people have started following the sedentary lifestyle, which will impact their health. For example, Local market sales had reduced by 40% compared to last year, while festivals. In conclusion, it is quite evident that the online shopping is advantageous for people with busy schedules. However, it also badly affected the market business and lifestyle of some people.
Nowadays, more number of
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people
are
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shopping
their needful things
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online
. Although there are
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many
advantages of this such as it is time-saving and you can order while sitting at home or office, there are few disadvantages
as well
, which impact the business of shopkeepers. This essay will
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explain
both the advantages and disadvantages of
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online
shopping.

On the one hand, buying things
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online
, which is quite popular these days, saves
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people
's time
as well
as energy.
Firstly
,
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people
are not required to go to market to
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purchase
things. Previously, when
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online
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shopping
was not popular, everybody had to go out to
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buy
their daily needs from
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shopping
complexes, which is
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used
to take their precious time in commuting. To illustrate this, most of the working
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people
are too busy that they do not have time to go and
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buy
things,
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so
they
usually
order from the office itself.
Secondly
,
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online
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shopping
websites provide more variety of products from
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different
vendor.
For instance
, They
also
provide option to compare the items.
Consequently
,
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people
prefer to do more
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online
shopping.

On the other hand
, the
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online
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shopping
had impacted the business of shopkeepers and multiplexes
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very
badly
and their sales have
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reduced
drastically
.
Additionally
, due to this,
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people
have
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started
following the sedentary lifestyle, which will impact their health.
For example
, Local market sales had
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reduced
by 40% compared to last year, while festivals.

In conclusion
, it is quite evident that the
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online
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shopping
is advantageous for
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people
with busy schedules.
However
, it
also
badly
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affected
the market business and lifestyle of
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some
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people
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. what are the advantages and disadvantages of this. v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 8.5
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