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An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online. v.16

An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online. v. 16
Online shopping has gained more patronage following the wide appeal it seems to be getting from internet users. However, while this phenomenon might be seen to be offering some pleasant results, one cannot but exercise caution while carrying out online transactions. One of the major benefits of online shopping is that it offers a stress-free shopping activity as one does not have to get on the road to visit a ‘break and mortar’ store to carry out his shopping activity, but rather visit an online shopping platform to carry out his shopping. More so, an online shopper needs not to worry about walking back and forth, the aisles of a supermarket trying to tick off his list. Instead, he could visit the different categories on the online platform and select his chosen items by simply swiping or clicking on his browsing device. On the other hand, online shopping has also recorded its downsides as it has left very sordid tales of woes for other online shoppers who have had cause to complain about their credit cards being cloned after making payments on some of these online platforms. In addition to this case of identity theft, some other downsides include illegal substitution of goods which can only be detected at delivery and failed transactions. Moreover, countless cases of multiple deductions for a single online transaction have been reported at banks to help resolve. In conclusion, while a huge volume in online shopping transactions could be seen as a measure of technological advancement for a developing country such as ours and thus be encouraged, adequate actions must be taken by regulatory agencies to ensure that those who would rather carry out their shopping online can do so without having fears of failed or fraudulent transactions. In addition, shoppers should always run a background check on any platform they wish to shop before they eventually register their credit card details to forestall any cloning incident.
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Online
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shopping
has gained more patronage following the wide appeal it seems to be getting from internet users.
However
, while this phenomenon might be
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seen
to be offering
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some
pleasant results, one cannot
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but
exercise caution while carrying out
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online
transactions.

One of the major benefits of
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online
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shopping
is that it offers a
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stress
-free
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shopping
activity as one does not
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have to
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get
on the road to visit a ‘break and mortar’ store to carry out his
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shopping
activity,
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but
rather
visit an
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online
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shopping
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platform
to carry out his
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shopping
. More
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so
, an
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online
shopper needs not to worry about walking back and forth, the aisles of a supermarket trying to tick off his list.
Instead
, he could visit the
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different
categories on the
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online
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platform
and select his chosen items by
simply
swiping or clicking on his browsing device.

On the other hand
,
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online
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shopping
has
also
recorded its downsides as it has
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left
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very
sordid tales of woes for other
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online
shoppers who have had cause to complain about their credit cards
being cloned
after making payments on
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some
of these
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online
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platforms
.
In addition
to this case of identity theft,
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some
other downsides include illegal substitution of
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goods
which can
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only
be detected
at delivery and failed
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transactions
.
Moreover
, countless cases of multiple deductions for a single
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online
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transaction
have
been reported
at banks to
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help
resolve.

In conclusion
, while a huge volume in
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online
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shopping
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transactions
could be
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seen
as a measure of technological advancement for a
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developing country
such as ours and
thus
be encouraged
, adequate actions
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must
be taken
by regulatory agencies to ensure that those who would
rather
carry out their
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shopping
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online
can do
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so
without having fears of failed or fraudulent
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transactions
.
In addition
, shoppers should always run a background
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check
on any
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platform
they wish to shop
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before
they
eventually
register their credit card
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details
to forestall any cloning incident.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online. v. 16

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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