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An Increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v.15

An Increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v. 15
These days E-commerce trade is commonly used by many people around the globe. A rising number of individuals are purchasing items on the internet. Although the benefits of seller and buyer are Quick and save time. The drawback is reimbursement for return and communication On the one hand, there are numerous advantages to purchaser and the seller for trading online, Firstly, The buyer can log on to the website and place his order and accordingly the seller can receive it. Both the parties need not spend time in negotiating to finalize the deal. On click of a button buyer will have his item and the produce shall make his sale. Secondly, The trade between the online retailer and the purchase happen quickly. Both the parties will complete the transaction within few seconds. For instance, I ordered Mobile phone on Amazon on single click and immediately after one day I received my product. The purchase and action were performed quickly in the online channel. On the other hand, One problem for both the trading entities is that refund process during the cancellation of the deal. Purchase some time do not find the product reliable and decide to return back to the seller. In online transaction, both of them find difficult because seller need to collect the item and then he has to return the amount. Until he receives the item the online retailer will not commence the refund transaction. Another issue with online shopping is the communication, usually the online platform run the application using algorithms and communicating with the computer for human is difficult. For example, Amazon is a popular web based application on internet, My friend placed an order and he received faulty good and to return it was difficult for him to receive his money back, he also faced a problem to communicate with the seller as opposite there were computer who can discuss the issue through email. In conclusion, time saving and faster are two benefits, whereas, refund and communication are the drawbacks.
These days E-commerce trade is
commonly
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used
by
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many
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people
around the globe. A rising number of individuals are purchasing
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items
on the internet. Although the benefits of
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seller
and buyer are Quick and save
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time
. The drawback is reimbursement for
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return
and
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communication


On the one hand, there are numerous advantages to purchaser and the
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seller
for trading
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online
,
Firstly
, The buyer can log on to the website and place his order and
accordingly
the
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seller
can receive it. Both the parties need not spend
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time
in negotiating to finalize the deal. On click of a button buyer will have his
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item
and the produce shall
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make
his sale.
Secondly
, The trade between the
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online
retailer and the
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purchase
happen
quickly
. Both the parties will complete the transaction within few seconds.
For instance
, I ordered Mobile
The singular proper name 'Mobile' must be used with a third-person or a past tense verb: "phones", "phoned".
phone
on Amazon on single click and immediately after one day I received my product. The
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purchase
and action
were performed
quickly
in the
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online
channel.

On the other hand
, One problem for both the trading entities is that refund process during the cancellation of the deal.
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Purchase
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some
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time
do not find the product reliable and decide to
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return back
to the
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seller
. In
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online
transaction, both of them find difficult
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because
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seller
need to collect the
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item and
then he
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has to
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return
the amount.
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Until
he receives the
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item
the
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online
retailer will not commence the refund transaction. Another issue with
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online
shopping is the communication,
usually
the
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online
platform run the application using algorithms and communicating with the computer for human is difficult.
For example
, Amazon is a popular web based application on internet, My friend placed an
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
order and
he received faulty
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good
and to
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return
it was difficult for him to receive his money back, he
also
faced a problem to communicate with the
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seller
as opposite there were computer who can discuss the issue through email.

In conclusion
,
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time
saving and faster are two benefits, whereas, refund and communication are the drawbacks.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay An Increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online? v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
336 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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