It is argued that there are numerous adverts on television with the aim of children as a way to raise their number of sales. This phenomenon exerts some detrimental effects on both children and their parents, and I am of the opinion that some measures should be put forward to tackle it.
When children become the main customers who companies gear toward, they and their parent will be burdened some unwanted outcomes. First and foremost, children will be swayed by advertisements to insist on their parents to buy products impulsively. While young customers are frequently not fully equipped with abilities to differentiate between good products or not. Therefore, their parents would purchase products reluctantly following their children’s hobbies and interest to satisfy their children’s demand. This will lead to a reduction in their own budget. Another detrimental influence is that when there have too many adverts on television, children’s cognitive development will suffer from. This is because they would believe in all information on that adverts.
This trend makes me believe that some strict regulations should be imposed by government’s bodies. The explanation for this is that when the government enacts laws on companies, this will raise their awareness about the role of exact information conveyed on television. If they do not supply exact and enough information about their products, they will be punished. Consequently, not only children but also their parents will gain positive effects. Parents could save money instead purchasing products for their children without intention.
To conclude, numerous adverts on television are exerting detrimental effects on not only children but also their parents and I would contend that government should enact some strict laws to tackle this trend.
It
is argued
that there are numerous adverts on
television
with the aim of
children
as a way to raise their number of sales. This phenomenon exerts
some
detrimental effects on both
children
and their
parents
, and I am of the opinion that
some
measures should
be put
forward to tackle it.
When
children
become the main customers who
companies
gear toward, they and their
parent
will
be burdened
some
unwanted outcomes.
First
and foremost,
children
will
be swayed
by advertisements to insist on their
parents
to
buy
products
impulsively
. While young customers are
frequently
not
fully
equipped with abilities to differentiate between
good
products
or not.
Therefore
, their
parents
would
purchase
products
reluctantly
following their
children’s
hobbies and interest to satisfy their
children’s
demand. This will lead to a reduction in their
own
budget. Another detrimental influence is that when there have too
many
adverts on
television
,
children’s
cognitive development will suffer from. This is
because
they would believe in all information on that adverts.
This trend
makes
me believe that
some
strict regulations should
be imposed
by
government
’s bodies. The explanation for this is that when the
government
enacts laws on
companies
, this will raise their awareness about the role of exact information conveyed on
television
. If they do not supply exact and
enough
information about their
products
, they will
be punished
.
Consequently
, not
only
children
but
also
their
parents
will gain
positive
effects.
Parents
could save money
instead
purchasing
products
for their
children
without intention.
To conclude
, numerous adverts on
television
are exerting detrimental effects on not
only
children
but
also
their
parents
and I would contend that
government
should enact
some
strict laws to tackle this trend.
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26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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