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All students should study a foreign language, starting at an early age. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.1

All students should study a foreign language, starting at an early age. with the statement? v. 1
There is currently a contentious argument over whether family life is being harmed by the high-speed and pressure of contemporary lifestyles. I totally agree with this opinion because the fast pace leads to less time for families to be together, and stress leads to arguments between family members. The main reason why I believe family life is being compromised is because families have less time to be with each other. This is due to family members being busier at work and with their social lives. As well as this, people have many things they have to do these days such as checking email, updating their online social status and so less time is left for family life. To illustrate, I spend about two hours online every night attending to daily correspondence before chatting with my family members, whereas ten years ago I would spend time with my family as soon as I walked in the door. Another reason why I support the notion that families are being impacted negatively is that the pressure of life these days means that even when families do get together arguments are more likely. This is because everyone feels tired and they are more likely to get irritated and react to their heightened emotional levels. In conclusion, I completely agree that the rapid pace and stressful nature of contemporary lifestyles are having negative consequences on family relationships. This is because family members have less time, and when they are together they feel less relaxed. Given this situation, it seems that family members should try to be more supportive of one another and also parents need to set aside regular times for families to relax together.
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currently
a contentious argument over whether
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family
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life
is
being harmed
by the high-speed and pressure of contemporary lifestyles. I
totally
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agree
with this opinion
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because
the
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fast
pace leads to
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less
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time
for
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families
to be together, and
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stress
leads to arguments between
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family
members.

The main reason why I believe
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family
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life
is
being compromised
is
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because
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families
have
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less
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time
to be with each other. This is due to
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family
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members
being busier at work and with their social
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lives
.
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as this,
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people
have
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many
things they
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have to
do these days such as checking email, updating their online social status and
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so
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less
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time
is
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left
for
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family
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life
. To illustrate, I spend about two hours online every night attending to daily correspondence
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before
chatting with my
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family
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members
, whereas ten years ago I would spend
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time
with my
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family
as
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soon
as I walked in the door.

Another reason why I support the notion that
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families
are
being impacted
negatively
is that the pressure of
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life
these days means that even when
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families
do
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get
together arguments are more likely. This is
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because
everyone feels
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tired and
they are more likely to
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get
irritated and react to their heightened emotional levels.

In conclusion
, I completely
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agree
that the rapid pace and stressful nature of contemporary lifestyles are having
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negative
consequences on
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family
relationships. This is
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because
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family
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members
have
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less
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time
, and when they are together they feel
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less
relaxed.
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Given
this situation, it seems that
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family
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members
should try to be more supportive of one another and
also
parents need to set aside regular
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times
for
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families
to relax together.
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One should not aim at being possible to understand but at being impossible to misunderstand.
Marcus Fabius Quintilian

IELTS essay All students should study a foreign language, starting at an early age. with the statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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