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The historical building in your place is in bad condition. Write to the local government. In your letter Why the building is importantwhat is the present conditionwhat actions must be taken v.1

The historical building in your place is in bad condition. Write to the local government. In your letter Why the building is importantwhat is the present conditionwhat actions must be taken v. 1
There are Hundreds of high institute or colleges in worldwide, but we need a more High academy because there are lots of students who are deprived of High institute education, so the new high school will definitely will help the students to take the advantage of this. I support the idea that the new high institute must be built in my neighbourhood. Firstly, the main important point is that the new high university will bring to many benefits not only for the students but also for the residents also. For instance, because of the new high faculty new stores will open like, stationery stores, medical stores etc. So the people who are living in the community and those who enrolled in the new high institution will definitely use these stores and there will be no need to go far away to purchase these items. For example, one of my friends who lives near to my city, has already announced these plans, now there is a new high academy in her society so now she is very happy and optimistic about her future because before that there were no high academy in her neighbourhood and she always used to travel 4 to 5 kilometres which is very hectic. Therefore, new high school will help the students and also for the residents. Secondly, because of the new high institution, there will be employment opportunities for the people who live in that community and for the one who live near to that centre, because of the new shops like stationary stores, medical stores, food stalls. For example, my brother who lived in the rural areas and that his public decided to build a new high school around 2 years ago now, his rural area has now changed dramatically because new shops provide an opportunity for the people who are unemployed. Therefore, because of the new high academy and shops, crime rates are not on the verge of the line. In conclusion, there are lots of advantages of building a new high school not for the people who live in the neighbourhood, but for the one who live near to our community.
There are Hundreds of
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high
institute or colleges in worldwide,
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but
we need a more
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academy
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because
there are lots of
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students
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who
are deprived
of
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institute education,
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so
the
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new
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school
will definitely will
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help
the
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students
to take the advantage of this. I support the
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idea
that the
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institute
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must
be built
in my
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neighbourhood
.

Firstly
, the main
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important
point is that the
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new
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high
university will bring to
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many
benefits not
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only
for the
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students
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but
also
for the residents
also
.
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,
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of the
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faculty
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stores
will open like, stationery
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stores
, medical
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stores
etc.
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So
the
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people
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who
are living in the community and those
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who
enrolled in the
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new
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institution will definitely
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use
these
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stores
and there will be no need to go far away to
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purchase
these items.
For example
, one of my friends
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who
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lives
near to my city, has already announced these plans,
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now
there is a
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new
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high
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academy
in her society
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now
she is
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very
happy and optimistic about her future
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before
that there were no
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high
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academy
in her
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neighbourhood and
she always
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used
to travel 4 to 5
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kilometres
which is
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very
hectic.
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,
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new
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will
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the
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students
and
also
for the residents.

Secondly
,
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of the
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institution, there will be employment opportunities for the
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people
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who
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live
in that community and for the one
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live
near to that
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,
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of the
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shops like
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stationary
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stores
, medical
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stores
, food stalls.
For example
, my brother
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who
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lived
in the rural areas and that his public decided to build a
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new
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high
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school
around 2 years ago
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, his rural area has
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now
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changed
dramatically
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because
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shops provide an opportunity for the
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people
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who
are unemployed
.
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,
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of the
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new
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academy
and shops, crime rates are not on the verge of the line.

In conclusion
, there are lots of advantages of building a
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new
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high
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school
not for the
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people
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who
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live
in the
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,
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for the one
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who
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live
near to our community.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The historical building in your place is in bad condition. Write to the local government. In your letter Why the building is importantwhat is the present conditionwhat actions must be taken v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
358 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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