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All cars that bruns fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them Do you agree or disagree? v.1

All cars that bruns fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them v. 1
Environmental problems nowadays escalate and it has become a major concern to protect our planet from pollution. It has been argued that cars running on petroleum and gases should be banned and electric cars should be introduced. I completely agree with the given statement and my reasons are discussed in ensuring paragraphs. The first and foremost reason is to adopt electric vehicles over fuel burning cars is they are nature compatible. In addition, these electronic cars do not produce toxic gases that harm both nature and human beings. Nowadays due to swell in number of cars consuming petrol and diesel has greatly hiked the rates of fuels. Thus in terms of economic expenditure these electronic automobiles are more convenient and preferable. Many developed countries and developing nations such as, United states, China, and Japan has already implemented the use of these cars and encouraged people to use eco friendly cars Secondly, another benefit is the speed, which means this electric cars have more power compared to fossil fuel cars. Due to this, public can reach their destination faster ultimately saving their time. In India government has announced the use of environmental friendly cars in huge proportion by 2020 and reduce the use of vehicles which pollute air. This enactment will be in action soon. Last but not the least many other countries has also incorporated a rule that taxes from electric car users would not be collected and they can use it tax free. In conclusion, there are abundant positive effects and this single change of substitution of car can be proved to be life changing for whole living habitat. It is not only beneficial for nature but also will help in eradicating numerous chronic diseases.
Environmental problems nowadays escalate and it has become a major concern to protect our planet from pollution. It has
been argued
that
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cars
running on petroleum and gases should
be banned
and
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electric
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cars
should
be introduced
. I completely
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agree
with the
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given
statement and my reasons
are discussed
in ensuring paragraphs.

The
first
and foremost reason is to adopt
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electric
vehicles over fuel burning
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cars
is they are nature compatible.
In addition
, these electronic
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cars
do not produce toxic gases that harm both nature and human beings. Nowadays due to
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swell in number
of
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cars
consuming petrol and diesel has
greatly
hiked the rates of fuels.
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Thus
in terms of economic expenditure these electronic automobiles are more convenient and preferable.
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Many
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developed countries
and developing nations such as,
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United states
, China, and Japan has already implemented the
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use
of these
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cars
and encouraged
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people
to
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use
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eco friendly
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cars


Secondly
, another benefit is the speed, which means this
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electric
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cars
have more power compared to fossil fuel
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cars
. Due to this, public can reach their destination faster
ultimately
saving their time. In India
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government
has announced the
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use
of environmental friendly
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cars
in huge proportion by 2020 and
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reduce
the
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use
of vehicles which pollute air. This enactment will be in action
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soon
. Last
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but
not the least
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many
other countries has
also
incorporated a
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rule
that taxes from
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electric
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car
users would not be
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collected and
they can
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use
it
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tax free
.

In conclusion
, there are abundant
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positive
effects and this single
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change
of substitution of
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car
can
be proved
to be life changing for whole living habitat. It is not
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only
beneficial for nature
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but
also
will
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help
in eradicating numerous chronic diseases.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay All cars that bruns fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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